crumpled love

everyone single or in a relationship once loved to fall in love and hated to say good-bye. tear drops can be rubbed off but pain cannot. The scar remains

I looked at you and couldn't take my eyes off you

You were special and inside you there is something new

I took a pen and jotted down a rhyme

I started enjoying the sunset for the first time

I missed you like the sun misses the moon in the morning sky

I cried out of happiness till my tears were dry

I loved horror films because your love haunted my life

We imagined our future together and said we will built our own hive

Whenever you spoke I gazed at your lips

When I faced harsh reality, I prayed so that your love never flips

I stopped eating chocolate because your love was more sweet

At night, I stared at nothing but could hear the morning birds tweet

I just wanted to keep your face etched in my mind

But every-time I looked at it I got lost and became blind

When my heart skipped a beat, I knew something was not right

My tears prevented my eyes to close at night

Without any reason I looked at the phone

When I was sad I wanted to hear a particular tone

I stared at a blank sheet 

And ignored the scorching heat

But distance crawled in and crumpled our love

I hoped your love wouldn't fly away like a dove

I had daydreams and nightmares at night

Because I was afraid of loosing you after our big fight

Author's Note

reviews plz

Reviews

[Abhishekizy]

Good Write, its quite a clean pure love you've tried to represent! Nice work

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much!!

[Sanjh]

It started wonderfully, I loved the way you've started it but somewhere in between you have tried a bit alot to rhyme it. Rhyming seems to be forced at some places, rhyming is always not important.
It's just my personal view. Overall a great write...:)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much!

[Sindu]

Nice descriptions. You showed many emotions here :)
Bit cheesy for me but it fits well here..

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much!

[Stephanie K.]

This was such a phenomenal poem! I loved it so much and how it described the way love can completely control you. I have just one minor suggestion but it will sound amazing even if you don't change it. In the last stanza I would flip the order of the lines to:
"I had daydreams and nightmares at night
Because I was afraid of loosing you after our big fight
I hoped your love wouldn't fly away like a dove
But distance crawled in and crumpled our love"
The words here are strong and the crumpled our love line has so much power that I think if it's at the end it will just give the poem a completely satisfactory ending. Keep writing pieces like this and you will go far. :)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much. I appreciate you liked it and thanks for the suggestions :)

[Emily]

I love everything about this poem!
Keep it up!

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Tasfia Islam]

Its awesome darling.... :)

My favourite lines:

Without any reason I looked at the phone
When I was sad I wanted to hear a particular tone

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thanks a lottttttttttttt

[Eleanor]

The fear of losing the one we love. Ah, we all go through it.
You showed a sad but romantic story between two people. This one has a lot of depth into it.
Great writing! :)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much. I really appreciate you liked it!

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Relationship insecurities well described

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Luximir]

This was a great written piece... very romantic, love it :)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Happy hours]

one of my favourite romantic poem.... :) beautiful :)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

thank you so much

[Happy hours]

you're welcome