Can you spent a day without the care of your parents? Did this question pop in your head while quarreling with them today? Read this poem to know how your childhood differs from now.
With an innocent mind you took birth Smiling you felt, it was such a simple earth Your mother tucked you in her arm You held her, knowing that no one can harm Your attempt to walk just failed three times But you kept trying, murmuring your rhymes Even knowing its uncountable, you start counting the stars You kept your mom's cellphone safely, knowing that it's hers You were in the family picture beside your mom You hugged her quickly, thinking that the toy is an atom bomb
Regretting you took birth Now you say 'How complicated is this earth' Now you are in your bed and turned off the light Remembering about your mom and your recent fight You shrieked because of the task you just failed Now you think about prince charming with whom your heart sailed Hoping your problems will be solved you gaze at the stars You throw away your mother's cellphone knowing it is hers You are missing in your new family picture and there is your lonely mom And now you sometimes wish to blow her with a bomb
Just my thoughts on how people changes from a toddler to a teenager. Most of the time we start flying forgetting to thank the people who gave us wings. So stop whatever you are doing now, just stop and go to the person you love and say 'thank you' . see how sweetness is added to your life
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This a a great piece!!! It's funny how we hurt the ones we love. Maybe it's because we know we can get away with it. It's a sick and twisted way of thinking when you step back and think about it. Family should be cherished but it's definitely a 2 way street! Love it! Keep writing, you are very talented
It does happen in such way but it's a phase which passes. I believe that parents understand it too and let it slide. But all it takes is a level head and little patience. Nice read! Gave realistic transition and it's good how you used the two sides of similar situations. Though the last line is too much, may be you are trying to show an escalated emotion.. In that case it works
It's true, we always forget about people who supported us to be at places where we currently are. There should be no one above your parents or the one who was with you when you needed them most.
Great poem, thank you for sharing...:)
I know my mother used to say that to me when I was tired and ready to be put to sleep at night, for me it is a fond memory. We did not see each other too often so the memory of it is sweet. We never over-said the 'I love yous' from when I was a young child to the age of 7. Well things change when family structures change if we do. There is always some kind of conflict.
You had me until the last line with a bomb on your mom. I'm sure that people experience drastic emotions but yeah.......that part was too much for me. That being said..............THE ENTIRE piece before that line was awesome. It gave me a memory of happiness remembering all of the sacrifice and kind things that my Mom did for me and a pang of sorrow that I am no longer in many of the pictures because my life is so busy I don't prioritize properly. I do see my lonely mom........................What a great poem overall. And it's YOURS!!! don't change your line to please someone else.........Keep writing!!
thank you so much!!! Actually I felt that in life there is a time when we feel our mom doesn't under.. read morethank you so much!!! Actually I felt that in life there is a time when we feel our mom doesn't understand us and we wish we could get rid of her. But as we grow up we come to know the truth and feel that how rubbish things we thought about our mother. I just wanted to picture that feeling.. I appreciate you liked it.
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Understand. The most important takeaway is that it is YOURS. You can refine writing / punctuation sk.. read moreUnderstand. The most important takeaway is that it is YOURS. You can refine writing / punctuation skills just like everyone (me especially). But never change what you want to convey :) What naturally flows out of you and your thoughts.
Brr, bombs and so, I never wished that to my mother, even in my biggest quarrels with her. But I do agree we must be grateful for everything we have received from our parents. And I also know that in a period of my life I thought my parents didn't understand me. But now I know for sure that it was not true. :)
Rudi
thougtful and adorable poem...you describe how poeple change with time and how complicated they make their life...With the busy schedule of life they even forget their loved ones..thanks for sharing this amazing writing:)
If a glass is half full and half empty, I see it as half empty because I know I have the ability to fill it up. Just like fire is hungry for woods, I am also famished and want to consume more and more.. more..