THE PULSES OF PAIN

Pain is an obvious feeling. Life is incomplete without it. Nobody loves to be tasted by the so called pain and its pulses. Its just that life sometimes breathe's pain for the bitter or better reasons

I fantasized an eternal love

which a demon of hell impotent's

which a mortal-demise unable's

        to detach ,to unbind ,to depart

Am hapless of this piss-ups

the weensy booze up's ,that teams out mine eyeball.

I tore up mine shower  which could  

out wept  all the downpours 

 that shot to this earth.

I wonder the pip of mine eyeball

over bears a saline-sink

which when withers sprouts a flavor

of voiceless grave and a savor of heart bearing.

I repelled mightily to defy the pain

which florets the drops of tears .

Myself i ascertained the spirit sensing the pulses of pain.

Reviews

[Surya]

Agreed, pain is for better, i liked about words you prefer and the way you play with them, ...

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I must applaud your good use of vocab and the good sounding flow of your poem...

[tanmay7551]

I agree! Pain can be bitter or can give better. Tolerance is what seems to rip everything apart... All people fall so easy into different lines based on the tolerance.

Well written!

[Farha Nayamee]

thank you for the review...i totally agree with you...based on the agony and tolerance....people feel the pulses of pain verily....

[Farha Nayamee]

Thanqu for ur review Ms red rose...poems mostly r kinda contextual feelings of a unique person...lot of them wont know the exact real meaning...multiple reviews and views for all...so i wrote what i my mental state had to say....but i am very thankfull for ur kind time to rrad and review my poem....☺😊☺

[Red Rose]

It's kinda confusing but it wil be better if you place the correct punctuations.
You are getting somewhere. It should only be a bit more refined. Good job tho..

[Farha Nayamee]

Farha Nayamee
Farha Nayamee
Thanqu for ur review Ms red rose...poems mostly r kinda contextual feelings of a unique person...lot of them wont know the exact real meaning...multiple reviews and views for all...so i wrote what i my mental state had to say....but i am very thankfull for ur kind time to read and review my poem....☺😊☺