Rose Petals

Rose Petals

A Poem by fantasylover13

 I don't see the clear wind

I don't see the heavens calls 

But what I see...

Is my life fading before my eyes

The rose petals fall

Just like my life they fall in vain

Will I ever see the clear wind?

Will I ever see the heavens calls?

But what I will alway see...

Is the rose petals fall

© 2009 fantasylover13


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For a 12 year old, you're very talented. I loved this piece. Easily related to and full of emotion. Great write. :)
~PJ

Posted 15 Years Ago


This is a fine poem. It's like a calm music playing, and yet it contains that deep, sad meaning that can be so easily unnoticed if you don't 'listen' close enough. I like how you used the rose petals for symbolism. I'm not the best at figuring out most symbolism, but the rose petals stand for the persons life, and how (he or she) can see it falling. The person cannot spot the clear winds, or heavens call, but the one thing they see can either be a comfort or despair. Maybe both.

That poem was good, though, and insightful.


Posted 15 Years Ago


Dark little write. I enjoyed it. Nice use of repetition without it sounding forced. I like the idea of lack of clarity through the winds and heavens. Can't wait to read more!

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on July 10, 2009

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fantasylover13
fantasylover13

chula vista, CA



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Hey everyone my name is Lexi and I love to read and write, I don't know why but I just do. Well I'm only 12 years old and please rate and comment on my stories please. Talk to me if you want to know m.. more..

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