A Grave Departure

I am not a threat to myself, I only express my deepest emotions through poetry, nothing else.

As I cry to myself,

alone in my room,

what was once a safe place,

has become my tomb.

I hide from the people,

and shut out the world,

and as the pain thickens,

depression unfurls.

I am covered in death,

but no one perceives,

they see only surface,

they are the naive.

As the door latches closed,

I prepare for my flight,

I am off to the heavens,

I am leaving tonight...

 

Reviews

[Andrew Tyler McCown]

I am not sure how a person can just not believe in suicide, it is not santa claus. I don't think that suicide is a good idea but it exists, it is tangeible. Either way, I love Doctor Deathstab's comment. And I love the line "I am covered in death." This is one of the better poems I have read about suicide and when I worked as an editor on a college lit mag I read a lot. I do think that the rhyme scheme is childish but also ironic because the subject matter is adult/deep. "I am condemming my self to hell" would be a better fit for your second to last line, I enjoy your poem as is but don't suicides go to hell? I'm not sure, I don't believe in the bible, I think the bible and Santa Claus are in cahoots together

[Your Victim]

Although I do not believe in suicide or other related subjects, I can see that this is a fair depiction of the raw emotion and distress that is so common in peoples' lives these days. The imagery was well captured and expertly written.
I cannot review this without stating this, though:
I am a firm believer that everything in this life happens for reason- whether we ever understand it, or not. Just focus on the optimistic aspects rather than the pessimistic pain and, eventually, time will heal all of the wounds that plague you. I can see that writting is your way of expressing this- and it is a safe outlet... as well as benefical and informative for those who read what you have to say.

[Doctor Deathstab]

I sometimes wonder why depression can be so destructive and negative while inspiring a person to be so creative and beautiful.