Just Us

If I reach for you,

will you take my hand?

Come away with me.

If I give you my heart,

will you keep it?

Run away with me.

If I spend the night,

will you hold me?

Will you stay with me?

Be mine as I am yours,

Two young hearts,

In love.

 

Reviews

[Kelley]

This was a poem filled with passion
and even kind of sensual.
I loved it! Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[poetic soul]

such an innocent wish of the heart put across in the simplest manner possible! it gives immense pleasure to read such creations.. :) thanks for sharing it...

Regards,
Poetic Soul

[Wildecat]

This is a beautiful love poem, a pleasure to read your poetry.

[Kiddx]

sweet charming and loving write, very beuatiful and well written, enjoyed your write.

[Andrew Tyler McCown]

I don't like the way the poem ends. The last line feels awkward and disrupts the flow. I like "just us" as a title but don't think that idea/line needs to be repeated at the end.

[~angelalala~]

simple charming & sweet. i love it. very enchanting, beautifully written