Let Go

Part of me wonders if I should let go?

Grasping at something no longer there,

I swollow myself whole.

You deserve more than to wait,

I tell myself as I sit,

In my dark, lonely hole.

I climb out, to see the dawn approaching,

And stumble upon something

Entirely wonderful.

I am saved from myself,

And without needing thanks,

He hugs me and never lets go.

 

 

Reviews

[Antony]

Something entirely wonderful, has a divine ring to it and so as you ponder this waiting game, something miraculous happens, a new fresh start awakens inside you, knowing he will never let go. That is how I interpret this. Fantastic! Natasha
Antony

[Andrew Tyler McCown]

Very good. you are a great poet

[Andrew Tyler McCown]

Try this:
I climb out, to see the dawn approaching,
and stumble upon something
Entirely wonderful.

The line "only to see the..." makes it seem as though the dawn approaching is a bad thing, ( Example: I survived the war only to learn my wounds would disable me forever) it is the word "Only." Because in the context of the poem it aprears that dawn is symbolic - it is a tangible repersentation of your inner personal change- and is a good thing.
Also, you don't need the comma after something, the line break is enough of a pause.
What about "Grasping at something no longer there" in line 2