Strawberry Ice

Strawberry Ice

 

 

I want you to know

I have read enough

of your words

to make me feel

warm sensations

 

my arms don't feel lifted

they just don't feel heavy

they don't ache at all

deep inside

 

my legs feel a little

restless like I'm playing

an organ of new presence

a renewed life force

 

my personal has yet

to get involved

I want more

maybe muchly

 

when I see your next

write, whether in poetry,

or gag or riff or note or gift

my heart has visions

 

most uplifting

I mean isn't it

supposed to just beat?

 

how can I possibly

know you or be

myself in words

 

the essence of it

is not in these

my pretty words not

my attribution not

my romantic, selfish

sentimental foolish

 

my love is not merely

the piece missing

in a grand ensemble

it is the jam in strawberry

and the cream of ice

 

I cannot taste your truth

but maybe I am toast

and you are my

real fruit spread

no sugar added

 

 

 

Xenion Ra

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[lilain]

This is very nice and you've picked such an interesting topic. I don't think anyone has written something like this. ;-) You've got some good imagery and the final stanza is beautiful:

"I cannot taste your truth
but maybe I am toast
and you are my
real fruit spread
no sugar added"

Well done!

[Emily B]

Such a sweet confection! Your voice shines through.

[Kayleigh]

Great use of words! :)
Fantastic imagery and very well-written! =)
Wonderful job!

[Angel's Lady]

Very nicely written! Great imagery. Good job!

[Nik Dendera]

Its interesting! A strange use of ideas here and I love strange!
The lines "my heart has visions, most uplifting, I mean isn't it supposed to just beat?" are great. The questioning of what you think and feel really stand out, this is a great piece. I look forward to reading more :)

[lithium]

interesting piece very provocative.

[Dani California]

This is really lovely and very sentimental.
It is so easy to connect to others through
their writing, as it shows
who they really are inside.
Getting to know someone
from within.. which I think can
be really wonderful..:)
Sometimes that connection is strong,
even if you've never met the person..
because what they write
is sometimes so personal..

I can relate to this and I really enjoyed it!

Wonderful job! Thank you for sharing it with me :)

Peace, Dani