ONE DAY

Little by little I see it all flow

My anger, my pain and my glow

My smile has gone far away

Torment and anguish in foreplay

When did I lose my heart and soul

Breathlessly wondering who stole.....


My prayers for death are unheard

Wonder whose prayers are answerd

My life passes by at a fast pace

But one day I will find my space

A day when I will finally have it all

Happiness and laughter over all.....

Reviews

[Chris]

a someday sort of poem...

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)

[Stanley Wilson]

Real mish mash of emotions cheery writing enjoyed this!!

[Nadia B.]

Wonderful poem, seesaw from low to high spirited emotions, really perfect for anyone who is having a bad day and needs a boost. I like the way you have written each line, as if it is a full sentence yet so much more could be said. Your rhyme scheme also works well with the flow and that you personalize the poem, saying "My" gives it that human character, which makes it relatable. Very well put title, it compliments the poem. Thank you for sharing, please keep writing!

[Cerise]

Awww...thank you darling...its very sweet of you to give such a wonderful review....:)

[Celestial Witch Child]

Keep holding on to that hope.

[Cerise]

Thank you...:)

[Lydia Shutter]

How sad you were praying for death.....I do hope things are looking brighter for you now and that laughter is in your life. You might want to change one typo in the line, "When did I loose my heart and soul" it should be "lose". Your heart and soul is still with you.....it was just taking a bit of a nap. Lydi**

[Cerise]

Lol...My days are fabulous just like me..:p...thank you for review my dearest lady.

[~]

Oh, i am happy the prayers for death are unheard, and i hope your days are better by now :D

[Cerise]

Lol...My days are fabulous just like me..:p...thank you for review my dearest lady..hope you are well..:)

[~]

happy to know, you are fabulously livin' it up :D

[luviva]

ohh darling,
I won't judge you just because of this write
because behind it all I can sense a heavy heart
yearning for happiness,
and tormented anger and fear of loosing whatever little peace you got left.
but that's the beauty of poetry, it helps let out all our feelings
and this is the first step to finding your space.
just trust the good old pen and paper.
they will help you heal.

thanks for sharing
JOAN

[Cerise]

Thank you for reading...:)

[luviva]

my pleasure

[Mitali Shah]

Good one. All the best, hope you get showers of happiness soon.. :)

[Cerise]

Thank you for reading...:)

[Shay]

nice simple poem, thanks for sharing

[Cerise]

Thank you...:)

[cycy]

My life passes by at a fast pace

But one day I will find my space

very interesting piece and well written too

[Cerise]

Thank you for review..:)