You Live In Me....

a short term love

I see you  come with a pout 

Your scent seeking me out

I try to ignore but for how long

Till when will I hold the passion at bay

I am sorry that you dont have a say

You are the light on my deep dark way

You are the rain on a scorching sunny day

You are my soothing balm on the itchy wound

I am sorry that you had to be marooned

I know baby , we were so well in tune

I guess things go wrong even if we assume

I owe you a lot but I cannot stay

Each of us have to find our way

There is no second choice I do know

Like I read you, if only you could read me too..

Author's Note

let me know what you think

Reviews

[paul sal.....]

at least he didn't have poison ivy or, worse; bifocals would have been a nice parting gift

[Cerise]

lol....Thank you for review..:)

[TL Boehm]

You are the light on my deep dark way
You are the rain on a scorching sunny day
You are my soothing balm on the itchy wound

I think the above are my favorite lines. Very Lyrical. Nicely done

[Cerise]

Thank you so much....

[Pax]

oh, i like the rhyming here and there, an easy flowing read...

its a sad piece, uncertain future for both, love seems mutual but there are hindrances, all are seems to be temporary somehow an affair in a wrong time... very expressed, and i like it, keep it up my friend...

[Cerise]

thankyou so mchc for review

[A. Amos]

The whole piece was brilliantly created, however the last line you nailed it my friend.

Note: would you be kind to send me RR for the piece you wrote on, 'Secrets'.

[Cerise]

Awww...thankyou sooo mch for ur kind review..i wll send u ryt away

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my friend

[Frontier]

You are the light on my deep dark way
You are the rain on a scorching sunny day
You are my soothing balm on the itchy wound
I am sorry that you had to be marooned- I liked the ending line here, was unexpected, adds interest.

The only thing I would re-check is the last 2 lines, maybe you can make it flow better?

[Cerise]

Thank you for review

[Matching Socks]

So beautifully expressed. Sometimes people enter our lives for a short while but really leave their mark.

[Cerise]

I agree wid u....thank you...

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh well a really direct message.Sometimes its difficult to reciprocate the emotions.and our naive heart needs time to understand the truth.. i especially liked the second stanza - light ,rain,balm.Still you had to part.Fates decree is something else. Good luck for your future :)

~Sophy

[Cerise]

Thank you dear lady..:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Never easy to say good bye.
"You are the light on my deep dark way
You are the rain on a scorching sunny day
You are my soothing balm on the itchy wound
I am sorry that you had to be marooned"
I do like the above line. Honest and direct. My kind of poetry.
Coyote

[Cerise]

Thank you so much..:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Naina]

very well written.. very nice description of the feelings..

[Cerise]

Thank you so much..:)