Every
time I see a tear falling through their eye My
heart cries at what their destiny decides.. Have
faith in lord , Oh children's of god The
day will come it will all be solved.....
You are the
precious jewels that need to be cleaned Your beauty is hidden and slightly unseen But
trust me one day you will rise high I wonder why those precious darlings, "sigh".....
Every time I see those tiny angels without food I praise the lord for every thing sweet and good One
day you will shine and the world will be bright It
will be a new day and a beautiful sight......
There
will come a time when you will smile And
everything will become right and worthwhile Trust you'r lord for he is the mighty, One to save God will give you without doubt all that you crave....
The
pain will vanish it wont stay for long Wonderful
memories will fill them along Don’t question too much why or how
Its about those poor kids who roam around the land without any reason to live still they survive. Its sad that we have so much to thank god for and still we are ungrateful. Its time we learned a lesson from them.
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dear poet.. You are the precious jewels that "need"
to be cleaned. "Without 'any' reason to live". Learning
proper grammer is easy if you relax and learn some simple
rules. Your poetry is very generous and heartwarming.
No man is an island. We need to help each other in a
loving and caring way. A little child shall lead them.
I love the innocence of young children and we can
learn from their warmth to be an example of acceptance.
truly... Pat
Dear poet hello this is KL Goode. There are ways of correcting one's grammar without being condescen.. read moreDear poet hello this is KL Goode. There are ways of correcting one's grammar without being condescending and usually, it is best to spell grammar correctly if you are going to correct someone else. Nice to meet you,
10 Years Ago
Ahh thank you both of u....I completely missed it...I might not have seen it while typing..But Thank.. read moreAhh thank you both of u....I completely missed it...I might not have seen it while typing..But Thank you again for showing me the flaws..
10 Years Ago
dear KL Goode... nice to meet you. Thank you for sharing.
truly... Pat.
Absolutely fantastic piece of work! I love the positive uplifting hope
and faith this piece gives off! I truly enjoyed reading this from top to bottom.
I love the wording and fluent flow, I also do uplifting spiritual
pieces, hope you will check them out, thanks for sharing your amazing poetry! PTL!
No child should ever go hungry...ever. It is a travesty when there is so much wealth in the world. I can feel your empathy and generosity. So many of us do not appreciate what we have.
This poetry can even bring a very great debt of such poverty issues. I want to put my few point of few on this subject...if you don`t mind:
"Every time I see those tiny angels without food
I praise the lord for every thing sweet and good... "
These lines're very good and beautifully pen'd. Richer've got too much money in their pockets but they never like nor even feel good to spend it on poorer... or do they? So, I think, as you get your job, you must spent a "very" small amount of money of poorer instead of having vodka in your flesh. Many chicks went out to loosen up their barefoot on the dance floor all ov`r the night having drugs or alcohol in their bodies to get built up high by bulls and they pay much for that. So, I think, instead of doing that all, the amount they spent on wines, and drugs, they can even spend it on poorer cause, vodka and drug`d only cost their whole lives but spending money on poorer`d give them more benefits like, blessing from them; blessing from God as well; one time food for poorer that`d make wild ones happy and on and on. And... Men should also do it instead of giving a "jack" to chicks.. putting them on cloud nine without even allowing them to touching the roof but every flesh of bottom... pushing their hands and head more hard into the concrete walls.. for please them as well as making the nights at all.
I wrote what came on my mind after reading this piece. So, bear with my words, fancy. Btw, I`m really surprised to read your this poetry. You`ve got a quiet nasty soul that makes me more crazy to drink you. Good by me! (Kidding) ;)
Pleasure.
Now.. even I thank you for reading my meager words cracked on ya. Keep writing. Yo.. read morePleasure.
Now.. even I thank you for reading my meager words cracked on ya. Keep writing. You write very deep poetry. And.. I send you my wishes your way that May you get published! ;)
9 Years Ago
Hahaha aftr 3 months u r replyng woow...thank you again..:)
dear Poet... I would not want to be
condescending... but sorry if I was.
We were fortunate to have a grammar
teacher in the 50's who made it easy for
us. However I still do not always express
myself correctly. When some one reviews
my poem and replies with the correct word,
I will do my best to accept it in the manner
they meant to do so. I am very sorry if I
goofed in my manner. Thanks for letting me
know. Sincerely... Pat
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Hey its completely fine...you are free to review it however u wish...trust me i do not have any iss.. read moreHey its completely fine...you are free to review it however u wish...trust me i do not have any issues with that...If u dont tell me then how will i ever know my flaws...Am grateful to you and i mean it...Thank you...:)
dear poet.. You are the precious jewels that "need"
to be cleaned. "Without 'any' reason to live". Learning
proper grammer is easy if you relax and learn some simple
rules. Your poetry is very generous and heartwarming.
No man is an island. We need to help each other in a
loving and caring way. A little child shall lead them.
I love the innocence of young children and we can
learn from their warmth to be an example of acceptance.
truly... Pat
Dear poet hello this is KL Goode. There are ways of correcting one's grammar without being condescen.. read moreDear poet hello this is KL Goode. There are ways of correcting one's grammar without being condescending and usually, it is best to spell grammar correctly if you are going to correct someone else. Nice to meet you,
10 Years Ago
Ahh thank you both of u....I completely missed it...I might not have seen it while typing..But Thank.. read moreAhh thank you both of u....I completely missed it...I might not have seen it while typing..But Thank you again for showing me the flaws..
10 Years Ago
dear KL Goode... nice to meet you. Thank you for sharing.
truly... Pat.
Oh yes, I totally agree with you that we are all guilty of taking things for granted in life. There are people (sadly a lot of kids) walking around not knowing where and when their next meal will arrive. I hate knowing and seeing people starving. I have such a tender heart and I don't like see people struggling. We aren't the richest people in the world but we don't suffer like others do. This point is why I get frustrated with people that desire pity parties so much. There are people starving and homeless. There are a lot of unfortunate people. We can't help everyone but we can make a difference and try to help. We can pray for those. I saw a couple of mistakes. As a Christian, my pet peeve is seeing "god" or "lord". In the Bible, it doesn't look like that. I will always see God or the Lord as proper nouns. I tell every person that, when I see that they mention Him. And the word "You'r" what is that? Is it suppose to be "your"? I think it is. I am just asking to make sure I read it right. Awesome write! Continue to spread such a true message!! :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you for your wonderful viewpoint..its truly touching..its wonderful to noe there r still peopl.. read moreThank you for your wonderful viewpoint..its truly touching..its wonderful to noe there r still people lyk u out thr..:)
Thank you for entering my little contest.
I cannot comment now as this would be unfair to other entries.
i shall return after the contest is over.
Best regards.
Clive.
I see the same here in Mexico and throughout Latin America. Yes, we should be grateful and there are many songs to be sun in behalf of the less fortunate. You have offered one and it was well penned with excellent word choice. The depth of feeling seeps through into the resader and I enjoyed this one very much.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for such a wonderful review..it meant a lot..:)