ENTWINED BY SOUL

Deep in my heart you will forever stay

Like the scars of our memories that lay.....

The thunder and lighting compatible like our chemistry

Like the heavy rain reminding me of our past history......

The pain in my heart is like a burning agonized flame

Rising and igniting until I erase the thought of your name.....

I miss the warmth and feeling of our soul entwined

The sunshine lighting your face and the sound peace......

If only they were reality and not a past

I guess there is no use fighting

You know you will be my last....

My soul will live with you in my thought

You know you are my true love knot.....

I know my life will go on

As long as I have you along...

So what if not in reality

I will survive with your fantasy.....

Author's Note

All comments are happily accepted

Reviews

[Neon]

"Deep in my heart you will forever stay"... Really? Thanks, fancy for keeping me at the depth of your heart. I liked it. I like your heart either... it`s quiet tasty to my heart. (Smiling)

Past history? I`m sorry, but I didn`t do anything wrong with you in my past. (Kidding)

"I miss the warmth and feeling of our soul entwined" ..Oh I see, so it means, you still remember out first night, we`d enjoyed all ov`r the night. Whao. What a night it was. Thanks for remembering it. (Joking)

"You know you will be my last" .. Ah! So, finally.. you said it. Thanks for loving me to death. Me too love you so bad. Lol

Nice poem.. again, your emotions`ve touched my heart. Keep it up! ;)

[Cerise]

Lol...Thank you my lord..:p

[Neon]

Lord? Oh.. yes, I hella love being a lord of you beautiful skinny ones chicks (Kidding) ;)

[Jennie Baron]

Yes, I agree this captures longing and loss very well. So different from the poem of yours that I just read that portrays the optimism and dreams of young love.

[Cerise]

Thank you dear for your review...:)

[WILDERNESS]

Very touching somber piece, the aching heart is so beautifully portrayed........................v nice

[Cerise]

Thank you so much...:)

[WILDERNESS]

welcome dear

[Shay]

the rhyming was good and I liked the over all message. I enjoyed this piece, thank you for sharing

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)

[Shay]

you are very welcome :)

[Blue]

"The pain in my heart is like a burning agonized flame
Rising and igniting until I erase the thought of your name....."

My favorite lines. And the last two lines hit home.

Some of the lines sound trite, though. Somewhat forced. Write often and your rhymes and rhythm will gradually improve. Keep me updated.

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)

[stars are far]

wow.. i can totally relate to this ...and well you expressed it very well...
i loved it ..like really LOVED IT ... well done :)
and well MOVE ON ..no one deserves you stopping and waiting for them XXD trust me

[Cerise]

Aww..thnx u sooooo much it meant alot...am glad u loved it..:D....thnx u for ur valuable advice..:)

[stars are far]

My pleasure dear :)

[Calibaster]

This is so good! I think it's also true, people do this all the time, and you captured that feeling perfectly! :) Great job! Keep up the good work!

[Cerise]

Thank you so much for such wonderful review...:)

[Calibaster]

You're welcome! :)

[sansame]

Very moving, sometimes these poems are hard to read as it reminds me that I know that feeling all too well! But that just means you captured it perfectly! Great job, looking forward to more writing from you :)

[Cerise]

Thank you so much for such wonderful review...:)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Romantic and sensual ... beautiful

[Cerise]

Thank you so much..:)

[Lethu]

....heavily fancied
but lacking physically
only the mind enjoys satisfaction....

[Cerise]

Thank you so much..:)