Birthday Tribute

few words for my friend on brtdhay

There are countless number of days

Innumerable number of thoughts

All wonderful, joyful and bright

Because of you, My Sunlight.....

You are the bubbliest and super sweet

Full of life,  always ready to treat

As irritating as you seem to be

Oh my friend I love you from deep down

Am sure you know , My Sweet Pea......

Come into my life with lots of love and care

Understanding and motivating-trust me, it was a dare

You are a big reason for my existence

Who has always been there for assistance

Glad to have you, lets party and dance

Today wont come , just don't miss this chance

Know that when you need me, I will always be there

Hell, heaven or high water, you shall find me everywhere

Let me not write more, before you fly high in air

But well it’s your day, I guess it’s fair

Just close your eyes and make a wish

May your days be filled with colors

And your nights sparkle with stars

May every wish you asked

You get all that super fast

Hey!!! Happy birthday 

Guess you speechless with nothing to say

Don’t forget to enjoy your  wonderful day

With lots of love coming, from not so far away…..:)

Reviews

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Lovely piece... my bday was on the 20th as well, spent it under the weather tho. I hope your friend enjoyed it a lot more than myself.

[Cerise]

lol...thankyou...sadly my fnd didnt enjoy mch either.....get well soon

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Sorry to hear that, and thank you.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

A lovely birthday tribute poem. Nicely done.

100 many mores

[Cerise]

Thank you...:)

[Leslie Philibert]

A nice tribute. Well done.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Wonderful tribute...fancyfati

[Cerise]

thank you..:)

[Renée]

Very sweet tribute …………..

[Cerise]

thank you..:)

[DaughterNature]

It's cute, but I think at this point it's really just an idea. For starters, even though you have a rhyme scheme and a basic rhythm, it feels more like you just threw words in your form instead of carefully thinking them through. Your lines are mostly cliched ideas from pop songs or Hallmark cards. Additionally, the piece runs on oddly because there is very little punctuation, and all of the lines and ideas run together. I don't mean to be rude -- like I said, it's a cute idea -- but honestly, it does need a lot of work.

[Cerise]

lol..thank you for your wonderful review i know it needs time..but i have literally no time..exams going on..:P...i jus maganed to write this in 3 mins...so it defi need lots of work..:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This is sweet and touching little piece.
Such a good little poem about someones birthday.
I loved the meaning and the emotion.
It was very heartfelt.
I loved the way it flowed and the rhyme scheme very well done.

[Cerise]

thank you..:)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your welcome :)

[Rita L. Sev]

This is such a nice gesture, and a great birthday celebration piece!

[Cerise]

thank you..:)

[Invisible]

what a happy poem its not tragic at all lol

[Cerise]

thank you..:)..hahaha

[Invisible]

you are welcome