Feelings

feelings poured out during some terrible times.

I don't know what is going on

Life is so uncool

What the heck is wrong

Something is amiss

Something is truly gone......

The reason of my living seems to fade

There in an uncontrollable rage

I fear for the war in my heart and mind

I was always known to be sweet and kind.....

The days have changed, I feel estranged

The tears are waiting to run down my cheek

The torture and pain makes my future looks bleak

There is a stillness that gives me fright

Lord only knows what has gone wrong or right....

I hope to see a spark of life

Panache, vitality, glimmer and desire

Far away from doubts and strife

Looking at a new day with bright sunshine

Hoping that we all will one day redefine

The reason of our living and our screwed up time.....

Author's Note

please feel free to tell me your opinion

Reviews

[Shay]

very good, I enjoyed reading this

[Cerise]

thank u..:)

[Prritiy]

The reason of my living seems to fade
There in an uncontrollable rage
I fear for the war in ma heart and mind
I was always known to be sweet and kind.....

deeply felt feelings conveyed nicely, i felt specially in above lines that you are just writing my feelings.
Pray you are fine now.

best wishes

[Cerise]

Thank you dear for understanding..:)..all is well

[Prritiy]

:)>>>>>>>>

[Barbara Walker]

Your words convey your intent so well! I can feel the emotion, the fear, the doubt, the wonder and even that tiny sliver of hope that one day things will be better. Nicely penned!

[Cerise]

thank you so much for your kind words..:)

[Lino Rie]

This was a great poem. I liked it.

[Cerise]

thank you...:)

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, even though I couldn`t understand from the text what the problem is...a good poem, considered and written with a personal voice..

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

I know from what you talk about. I've felt like this for many years. God bless you in all that you endeavor. :-)

[Cerise]

Aww..thank you so much for such a wonderful wish....same 2 u..:)

[Fairytale]

I get a feeling of uneasiness about life throughout this poem. I like the little attachment at the end. That added a bit of comic relief.

[Cerise]

thank you for trying to understand my poem... :)

[Dayran]

Feels good to let it all hang out don't it? Nice write.

[Cerise]

thank you...ya it feels great..:)

[Fiona Nadine]

It's really good, but there a few grammatical errors such as:
dont needs an apostrophe
a miss should be amiss
there needs to be a space after the comma after panache
Otherwise, it was great :)

[Cerise]

thank you so much for reviewing..:)

[Fiona Nadine]

no problem :)

[Calibaster]

I like it! Nice job! :) keep up the good work!

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)

[Calibaster]

You're very welcome! :)