Prologue

A life of two people entwined together with secrets hidden in the past. Will love be able to conquer over the dark truth.

Frank pulled her to him and looked deep in her eyes and said, "Why do you do this when it troubles you as much as it troubles me. Why do you run away from me?"

Geisha pulled away, unable to answer.

As is he could not bear to be apart from her, Frank reached out desperately for Geisha again and pleaded, "What is it that keeps you away from me? What is tormenting you my love? You do not have to fight this battle alone. Tell me and I promise I will see to the problem. Don’t you have feelings for me anymore? Is that it? "

Frank felt as if tons of questions were bubbling within him and that this may well be his last chance.Geisha knew that her time was up. If she stayed a minute more she would give in and would never let go. She looked away and said one single word that crushed his heart to pieces. She said

" Yes"
A tear slid down her peach like cheeks like a pearl filled with pain. It tore at her heart, but she knew she had to be strong. Frank looked deep into her eyes once more, as if he was searching for the lost love within her, one last time. Like an image, he wished to capture forever in his mind. Then he turned and walked away without a backward glance.

Author's Note

It is my first try let me know what you felt..:)..Thank you

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Your words leave me wanting to know what secrets they hold. You have injected just enough emotion and facts to make us ask!
It is very good, and I look forward to reading more!! My favorite line:

A tear slid down her peach like cheeks like a pearl filled with pain. It tore at her heart, but she knew she had to be strong...lovely imagery!!

[Cerise]

Thank you for your wonderful words...:)

[Rhianne Ney]

Great imagery and vivid thoughts. You should just omit some:

What is tormenting you my love?". =here you can omit the extra period since it's not needed
As is- I think is should be if

Anyways, as the blunt thing that I was, which you can probably ignore (:

This is a great start and well, provides my head with a lot of questions like what? why? where? when? who? how?

Still, (ignore this if you want a positive feedback) I think, it was unnatural for a guy to simply drop the subject like it doesn't mean anything at all,I think there should be a portion of description on the guy's part when the girl said, 'yes' I wasn't satisfied with the words-shatter his heart to pieces.

But anyways, you've done a great start (:

[Cerise]

Thank you for your kind words..:)

[Rhianne Ney]

I wasn't that kind, man. I was rude at some lines and I'm so sorry about that really I am

[Cerise]

heeeey..it was kind of you to say what u felt..i didnt make this piece public to get some fake comments..anything u wish to say will alwayz be accepted with a smile...relax..:)

[Rhianne Ney]

Oh, sorry... I'm just like whoa, I don't know maybe just thinking that I could help but I sounded pretty rude, right? You're pretty mature to accept it quickly (:

[Cerise]

naah u weren't rude..a person doesn't improve if he/she gets sugar coated words alwayz......thank you..:)

[Rhianne Ney]

Your welcome, glad to be of help (:

[marie]

powerful write:) can't wait to read the rest of it, i think you have a keeper here:)

[Cerise]

Thank you for your wonderful words..:)

[marie]

No problem:)

[K.G]

this is very. . .Shakespherian like, kinda like romeo an juliet with a modern english twist to it ot something, Your words are also quite delicate in this, and you can get the sence of what frank an geisha's emotions are. i love it much, will there be more?

[Cerise]

Awww...Thank you so much...your opinion meant a lot..truly made my day....and yes there will be more..

[K.G]

yay! and im glad it did ^.^

[Cerise]

lol....:)

[K.G]

:3

[Nicky Sarti]

I liked this.
It made me want to know more and read more.
Though it (or rather the name Frank) made me think far too much about CSI: Miami and Frank Tripp...
But that's probably told you far too much about me than I would have liked, or indeed should have done...
Anyways... this is a good start. Other than tweaking a few grammatical bits and bobs, this has some really good potential to it.
Well done and I hope to see more from you young Miss.

[Cerise]

Thank you so much for your review..:)

[Nicky Sarti]

Anytime, always welcomed and meant x

[Renée]

oh.... very good... I think Sheila covered it nicely

[Cerise]

Thank you

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!! This is absolutely amazing!! I can't wait to read what happens next!!

[Cerise]

Thank you so much..it meant alot..:)

[Lonely Islander]

Wow! What a great introduction. Heaartfelt and really touchy as well. Looking forward to future chapters...are they up yet?:-):-):-D.

[Cerise]

Awww...Thank you sooo much...it meant a lot...well i wll work on it soon..didnt gt tym yet..:)

[Hester Vane]

A very emotional start to a story but wonderful! All I would say is maybe string out franks questions a bit more, to add a bit of tension! For example:
Frank pulled her to him and looked deep in her eyes and said, "Why do you do this when it troubles you as much as it troubles me. Why do you run away from me?"
Geisha pulled away, unable to answer.
As is he could not bear to be apart from her, Frank reached out desperatley for Geisha again and pleaded, "What is it that keeps you away from me? What is tormenting you my love?"

Something like that. It will great more intrigue and layers! But a great start, because I really have no idea what could happen next but I cannot wait to find out!

[Cerise]

Thank you so much for your wonderful ideas..u were of great help..:)

[Stanley Wilson]

got me!!! waiting for the rest

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)