A DISCARDED JEWEL

A poem on how a child feels after being abandoned by her mother..Tons of questions with no one to answer...

There are days, when I wonder

Wonder where you are

Wonder where you went

Leaving me alone to defend

 

I hope you would come, every single day

A day is not easy to pass by,

I wish you would just come and say

Oh! My cupcake come here, don't worry

I know am late, I am so very sorry

When mama is here nothing to fear

My teddy bear, you are my dear

 

I wish you were there, In my childhood

Lulling me to a treacle chocolaty dream

A hope that you would buy me new toys

When, I did better than I could fare

The hope still throbbing in my heart,

Even after those precious years apart.

     

I wish you were here to comfort

Saying darling love, but never hate

The agony in my heart a part of me

Reminding me of a banshee

Why mama, Did you leave such everlasting pain

With no one to lean on to, or anything to gain

 

Oh Mama! What was your reason

To dump your newborn child

Oh Mama! why could you not take me along

Was, I a trouble even though so small?

How I wish you were here with me today

We could have stayed together

Forgiving each other, No need to betray

 

Today, I have every thing in my life

Except, a sense of completeness

A solitude resting deep in my heart

Reminding me of a wandering soul

That has neither pulse, nor a beating heart

No tears of blood, or happiness to depart

My wish for you is still the same

May you come home, safely putting an end

To this Heart-wrenching game

 

 

Author's Note

PLese let knoe know what you think of it..Thankyou

Reviews

[Sakshi]

Well firstly, the nick name 'cupcake' reminds me of what my guy calls me sometimes 'pudding pop'. And I tell him not to cuz its too cheesy and kiddish :P
Well, as of the poem, it clearly states the unrest in the person's mind after separation from the beloved. And when that beloved is MOTHER, it really makes you ask a million questions- to yourself, to the world, to the circumstances, fate.

Very well written my friend. Good job!!

[Cerise]

heheh..awwww..dats sooo sweet..its nt kiddish..its showing love..:)..Thankyou for your wonderful opinion...:)

[.]

U really expressed ur pain and the title really suited the poem! 100/100 Great poetry!

[Cerise]

Thankyou :)

[.]

No problem! :)

[AE]

I felt it, the pain and emptiness of the child who lost their mother. The title matches perfectly with the poem. Beautifully written.

[Cerise]

Thank you amber for your kind words..:)

[saunved]

I felt my heart actually melting as I read the poem...how I thank God for the mother that he gave me! The poem is perfect for those kids who ignore their mothers or for the mothers (very rare but there are some) who ignore their kids...
Lovely poem altogether and the title gives you its "bragging rights"!

Hey, please read my story "The Doll" (http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/saunved/1075717/)...I need to know what you think!

[Cerise]

Awww.....Thankyou so much for such wonderful words..:)..i will try to read..:)

[Patricia B. Hepler]

The title, "A Discarded Jewel", is perfect for this poem. The lack of a mother's love is so deeply felt.. The perspective of the child's point of view on their immense grief is heart-wrenching.
Excellent.
*pat

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou so much for your kind words..:)

[Tarry Franck]

Very heart wrenching - actually brought tears to my eyes. Very moving poem. Thanks for sharing.

[Cerise]

Aww..Thank you for your kind words..:)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Abandoned and alone, left to wonder why this wound in our heart will not heal. Writing and rewriting the script in our minds, countless times, rehearsing all of the things that we should, would, could say to the object of our desire if they deign to materialize into our lives once again. Taking the pain, forging from it a strength to overcome obstacles and to fulfill as much as life will allow and yet always, always feeling the emptiness, the longing, willing for the movie that is forever playing in our mind to have a happy ending.

The only solace that may be had for this poor reader is that every story ends differently. Most are tragically unfulfilled and yet we know that somewhere, a few do have that happy ending.

Do not be too concerned with ornament and decoration. It is the thought that counts most and you have given us much to think about. Well done.

[Cerise]

Aww..Thank you soo much for your wonderful sharing your wonderful thoughts...

[Blue Ivory]

Is this a true story? Anyway, this is really sweet and deep. Good work!

[Cerise]

nope...a story very common in many poor homes or in some cases evn rich..Thank you..:)

[Anonymous Girl]

AWW!! Really heart touching!!

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)

[Anonymous Girl]

^^

[Lily Mae]

I lived this through the lives of my friends who have gone through the same thing. It's so hard and complex ..all the emotions and pain that go with this. You have penned it well..xo

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou for your kind words...:)