Smoking a day kills a life away

the prolonged pain from cigarettes and problems from its continuous usage

 

The dead would rather wish to be alive

Here you are giving it all away in vain

Ended up plotting your own death

What I ask you, will you ever gain?

One puff is all you need, to kill a creature

And boom, it becomes a bad deed

Can't you think for once, how it will harm?

The young, the old, it’s like a bad luck charm

Addicted you are and you might forever be

Are those memories so unbearable to see?

You want to forget better find another way

Solution is in front, so you had better stay

 

Cigarette is not the problem to your matter

The only thing it will ever do is kill and shatter

Think of those suffering because you are insane

Who cannot breathe, Who are in profound pain?

 

Lungs collapsed, back cut open

It sounds horrible to even be spoken

Stand up and fight diseases on your way

For humanity’s sake stop with this play......

 

AN INNOCENT CIGARETTE A DAY WILL  RUIN YOUR LIFE IN A HUGE WAY...

Author's Note

Emphysema-is a long-term, progressive disease of the lungs caused by smoking...Each one of you can contribute in a huge way by not smoking...Every time you smoke your life decreases and I believe life is very precious to waste.

Reviews

[Nadia B.]

I wish this could be posted on every bar and in every public window possible. Very courageous of you to write this and thank you for standing up for those who are specifically allergic to cigarette smoke. It is absolutely heartless to smoke around a child, let alone other adults. It's bad enough that there is so much pollution in so many areas of the world that one can barely see the sky. It is a terrible addiction that yellows the teeth, the nails, discolors the skin, blackens the lungs, and destroys ones own breath. The worst part is, it reeks for miles and sticks to everything. I like the way you ask your questions, the boldness of it. Thank you so much for this poem, God bless you, and hope you may be free of smoke! Honestly I really feel for those who are addicted to cigarettes, who are unable to stop even though they wish they could. They are not bad people, they really do need help. It would be interesting to see a poem showing their perspective. Still thanks again for spreading the awareness!

[Cerise]

Thank you soooo much for such a wonderful review...I completely agree with you...I wish we styed in. Better world...I wish we could save them all...

[Aehr]

i totally agree. I like your word choice here. It's amazing. And the cause you're writing about is actually really good. :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words rhea..:)

[Aehr]

anytime! :)

[Dayran]

Spoken like a true non-smoker!

[Cerise]

:)

[Harley (arbiter)]

A great poem. So true aswell. My parents smoke a lot and its terrbile. Great job

[Cerise]

Thankyou...:)..

[Pratik]

Being a non smoker I found this delight to read... A well-intended piece that aims to deliver a message... I have two suggestions: 1> you can make this one a bit shorter.. that would make it crisp and project the message it has to deliver without the readers getting lost in the lines 2. You have used a non-uniform rhyming style. You can make it more uniform. The poem cut down to fewer lines combined with an uniform rhyming style can do wonders to an already well written piece like this :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your wonderful opinion..:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha, an anti smoker. Good. I agree totally with you on this one. A good rant about a filthy habit!

[Cerise]

Thankyou...

[Mia]

I can tell you're really passionate about this topic. I think it was a little harsh, if you’re trying to get someone to listen to your reason...
"Have you no shame
No, fear nor heart,
No one who can tame
Have you no understanding of
How to use your delicate brain"
Might not be the way to go, but I get where you are coming from. Smoking is the most selfish habit there is!
Anyways, well written :) thanks for sharing

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words mia..:)

[Mia]

You know, it's always a pleasure :D

[emmy bon]

what benefit drives you in inhaling that into your pure body.
"cigarette" smoke one of it and it decreases your life span by one day.

nice thought and well done

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Very thoughtful of you to take up such a topic for a poem.
I loved the way it is written and what message it sends across.

"How it decreases your super tiny life
The dead would rather wish to be alive
Here you are giving it all away in vain
Ended up plotting your own death
What I ask you, will you ever gain?"

Very well portrayed :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..Am glad you liked it..:)