Is it wrong to be rich or poor..?

a short poem on rich and poor

The birds chirping

Like the sound of bell

The rugged look of poor

Their stale smell

The smiling children

With a wonderful spell

The polluted surroundings

And lots more

The world seems brighter

For those who snore

 

Under microscope or sunlight

Look at the matter with a naked eye

Matters of poverty have gone too far

Politicians are sleeping to start a war

 

Filling their pockets to live royally

What of those poor working loyally

The pile of work of rich is too high

To consider about the poor

So all they do is lie

 

Think once for goodness sake

What about those things vanishing on earth

People will become extinct like all things do

Have you no shame or fear of the lord

Nothing will happen if you do well out of the blue

 

The life of poor forever in my eye

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die

It is poignant and very hard to forget

The feel of being poor once you are left

 

To feed and clothe is not a joke

To smile and live is a great hope

To beg, and cheat is not proper

You are role models teach them the way

 

Give them one chance

A high standard of living and a good pay

They will make you proud in every way

For the love of God, just do as I say

I wish your well-being and a bright day...:)

 

Author's Note

Tell me how you felt after reading...always wanted to give a try on writing about poor and rich...didn't do great but I guess its ok..

Reviews

[Pratik]

I liked this piece. This is a strong, defined writing that doesn't mince words. The topic you write about requires a powerful tone which you successfully deliver. This also ends on a positive note where a message is given for the world in general. i would be honest with you though - This is not my first time I am reading a piece on faulty political system and corruption. I think the issue is so vital that it commands a lot of attention. You have managed to put your view across the table! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words and giving your view point..:)

[Dr. Wood ?]

its not bad..it stumbles here and there but it portrays a good message

[Cerise]

Thankyou..not one of my best..:P

[emmy bon]

NICE

[Cerise]

Thankyou

[gombeggar]

a good and positive work here...somewhat lost in translation though...you're grammer is off...but i get your meaning still

[Cerise]

Thankyou...:)

[K.G]

not my favorite peice, but it was nice an simple in way, and i felt a little bubbly at the end an laughed a little(note that is good, considering i just woke up) cause all in all, this poem has words of truth in it

[Cerise]

lolz...thankyou...i know not much of my favourite either..i wanted to write somethng els and ended up with this..:P...

[K.G]

haha its allways good to try new stuff

[Cerise]

:P...thankyou for your motivation..next time i write crap i shall send you request first..:P..kidding

[K.G]

lol i dont mind"crap" sometimes can be amazeing haha(like that picture with a red dot in the middle)

[Dark and Mysterious]

Rich and poor...I've thought about writing on this too but never could express myself good enough. Whenever I look back at any argument whether big or small I've noticed that the root cause is always money. Whether it has been directly or indirectly it has always been the cause of social unrest. Great write :)

[Cerise]

Very well said...thankyou..:)

[Chris]

I felt a sense of confusion. I know it's a non-native language as well but I didn't feel a solid choice of direction or purpose. Just me I guess.

[Cerise]

thankyou for your opinion

[That_Girl]

Honestly, people in the middle class have been very angry towards people in the upper class lately and I don't really see much reason. Not entirely at least. There's always two sides. Most of the rich have worked to get where they are. And that's not to say the poorer aren't working, many of us are. But then you also have those that take full advantage of the system and government aid that don't try to get back up on their feet. That hurts the country.

Sorry about the ramble. Heh. Good poem! :)

[Cerise]

ahha thats nt ramble a very good point of view....Thankyou

[Stanley Wilson]

flowed really well beautifully written the richest person is someone who is loved and the poorest is that guy with billions that lives all alone

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for wonderful words..:D