Is it wrong to be rich or poor..?

a short poem on rich and poor

The birds chirping

Like the sound of bell

The rugged look of poor

Their stale smell

The smiling children

With a wonderful spell

The polluted surroundings

And lots more

The world seems brighter

For those who snore

 

Under microscope or sunlight

Look at the matter with a naked eye

Matters of poverty have gone too far

Politicians are sleeping to start a war

 

Filling their pockets to live royally

What of those poor working loyally

The pile of work of rich is too high

To consider about the poor

So all they do is lie

 

Think once for goodness sake

What about those things vanishing on earth

People will become extinct like all things do

Have you no shame or fear of the lord

Nothing will happen if you do well out of the blue

 

The life of poor forever in my eye

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die

It is poignant and very hard to forget

The feel of being poor once you are left

 

To feed and clothe is not a joke

To smile and live is a great hope

To beg, and cheat is not proper

You are role models teach them the way

 

Give them one chance

A high standard of living and a good pay

They will make you proud in every way

For the love of God, just do as I say

I wish your well-being and a bright day...:)

 

Author's Note

Tell me how you felt after reading...always wanted to give a try on writing about poor and rich...didn't do great but I guess its ok..

Reviews

[Pratik]

I liked this piece. This is a strong, defined writing that doesn't mince words. The topic you write about requires a powerful tone which you successfully deliver. This also ends on a positive note where a message is given for the world in general. i would be honest with you though - This is not my first time I am reading a piece on faulty political system and corruption. I think the issue is so vital that it commands a lot of attention. You have managed to put your view across the table! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words and giving your view point..:)

[Ireca]

This is a great poem. I love the line "what of those poor working loyally."

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much..:)

[quinfinn]

you did fine...and to quote from Jesus Christ Superstar "there will be poor always,
pathetically struggling...look at the good things you've got" i wrote my version on this theme some time ago and called it "the American nightmare" maybe it would interest you

[Cerise]

Thankyou..i will check it out..:)

[quinfinn]

i'll try and feature it in a few minutes

[MOON]

Powerful write sad and true. Flows well.

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much..:)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

I don't think it is wrong to be rich or poor...some things are more attainable to some people than others...but we all have the capacity to gain riches...just takes longer for some than others....good write...

[Cerise]

ture..well said...Thankyou..:)

[Mark]

For me personally, I think blaming the rich for the poor only makes victims. We are all capable of obtaining riches, for the vast majority it is simply a matter of realizing that as a truth rather than a fantasy, then working hard to get it.

Your words were worth reading though, I wasn't sure of everything you were trying to say but I liked the poem.

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for your view point...:)

[Ahmad Cox]

Such truth and power. I loved it

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much..:)

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!! really great job!!

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Sakshi]

Love this one fancifati..!!
its such a good and apt comparison...with such fluency!!

The 1st few lines pulled me to read more...Love them
"The birds chirping
Like the sound of bell
The ragged look of poor
Their stale smell
The smiling children
With a wonderful spell
The polluted surroundings
And lots more
The world seems brighter
To those who snore"

But my absolute fav line is this - "It is poignant and very hard to forget
The feel of being poor once you are left"

You did a commendable job attempting this one, and signing off positively, with "For the love of god just do as I say
I wish you well-being and a bright day...:)"

All in all this was an absolute pleasure to read...so much depth, yet a positive feeling that something can change... great thoughts!!

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much your lovely words could get a smile otu of anyone..am so glad i posted it here even after thinking it was rubbish...:P...Thnakyou soo much again..it meant a lot to me...and i couldnt thankyou enough for it..:)

[Sakshi]

Thanks to you, for presenting such an insight on the differences between rich n poor, how they think, what they dream of. This poem starts a series of other thoughts...stirring up one's mind!

[Wakeofahero]

This is good, not to mention I always thought the topic of writing about poor and rich is hard. I liked this though, you did a fine job

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)