Is it wrong to be rich or poor..?

a short poem on rich and poor

The birds chirping

Like the sound of bell

The rugged look of poor

Their stale smell

The smiling children

With a wonderful spell

The polluted surroundings

And lots more

The world seems brighter

For those who snore

 

Under microscope or sunlight

Look at the matter with a naked eye

Matters of poverty have gone too far

Politicians are sleeping to start a war

 

Filling their pockets to live royally

What of those poor working loyally

The pile of work of rich is too high

To consider about the poor

So all they do is lie

 

Think once for goodness sake

What about those things vanishing on earth

People will become extinct like all things do

Have you no shame or fear of the lord

Nothing will happen if you do well out of the blue

 

The life of poor forever in my eye

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die

It is poignant and very hard to forget

The feel of being poor once you are left

 

To feed and clothe is not a joke

To smile and live is a great hope

To beg, and cheat is not proper

You are role models teach them the way

 

Give them one chance

A high standard of living and a good pay

They will make you proud in every way

For the love of God, just do as I say

I wish your well-being and a bright day...:)

 

Author's Note

Tell me how you felt after reading...always wanted to give a try on writing about poor and rich...didn't do great but I guess its ok..

Reviews

[Pratik]

I liked this piece. This is a strong, defined writing that doesn't mince words. The topic you write about requires a powerful tone which you successfully deliver. This also ends on a positive note where a message is given for the world in general. i would be honest with you though - This is not my first time I am reading a piece on faulty political system and corruption. I think the issue is so vital that it commands a lot of attention. You have managed to put your view across the table! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words and giving your view point..:)

[Mia]

Money is the root of all evil...money also makes the world go round. It's a catch 22. How much money we have shouldn't define who we are but sadly in today's world it does. Very interesting subject for your poem and you wrote it well! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much mama mia it was very sweet of u..:P

[Mia]

LOL! You're welcome :)

[RachelReaper]

I felt like you were passionate about what you were talking about, I could feel that you thought it was very unfair how the rich get to live on in luxury and the poor slave away for poverty. oh, and just a thought, but you spelled "asleep" "a sleep", you might want to fix that.

[Cerise]

Ahh..thankyou..yes, its true i alwayz wanted to write a piece on rich adn poor..but i geuss i ended up with this..Thankyou for correcting..:p

[tamsin]

I think this subject, like most of us in the world today is close to your heart. You stamp your point across the whole poem, and it comes across as genuine.

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Hester Vane]

I think you did well. I can definatley see the message you are trying to portary. Maybe just re-read it and edit some of the grammatical errors to help with the flow of the piece. But other than that a good effort.

[Cerise]

Thankyou i will edit this is a rough draft..:)

[de_maruf]

fine

[Cerise]

:)

[Barbara Walker]

I agree with you! I wrote two poems that have to do with this subject!

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou..:)..it meant a lot.

[Sami Khalil]

Good subject . Thank you for sharing

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...

[Bewitching Sensations]

brilliant.. well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou...

[lee von cleef]

Poor, Rich,? Money, None,? Never having any life is not easy but bearable ,now having it and losing it all, different story, new money or old,changes the value , Perspective and Empathy,I think you need a lot of both.

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your opinion..

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Since most others have applauded the message and the effort with implied request at self-reflection regarding the topic of wealth versus poverty - I think I shall offer a different tack. Consider your assumptions and from where they originate. The value judgements necessary to question this aspect of the human condition do not spring forth fully clothed from the void but are learned from both shared experience and the values imparted by minds and spirits closest to you. Wonder you not that these things are offered up to you from cradle to grave? And for what purpose? Perhaps to guide you through the ordeal of life. Perhaps something even yet above that meager goal. Beyond rich and poor wonder you not why, for every day you live, something else must die?

[Cerise]

woooow..amazingly written...lolz..i would rather say you write a poem on it and i shall review it...thankyou for your great opinion and kind words..:)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T. Serrat]

It is done: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/ufoauthor/1044808/