Is it wrong to be rich or poor..?

a short poem on rich and poor

The birds chirping

Like the sound of bell

The rugged look of poor

Their stale smell

The smiling children

With a wonderful spell

The polluted surroundings

And lots more

The world seems brighter

For those who snore

 

Under microscope or sunlight

Look at the matter with a naked eye

Matters of poverty have gone too far

Politicians are sleeping to start a war

 

Filling their pockets to live royally

What of those poor working loyally

The pile of work of rich is too high

To consider about the poor

So all they do is lie

 

Think once for goodness sake

What about those things vanishing on earth

People will become extinct like all things do

Have you no shame or fear of the lord

Nothing will happen if you do well out of the blue

 

The life of poor forever in my eye

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die

It is poignant and very hard to forget

The feel of being poor once you are left

 

To feed and clothe is not a joke

To smile and live is a great hope

To beg, and cheat is not proper

You are role models teach them the way

 

Give them one chance

A high standard of living and a good pay

They will make you proud in every way

For the love of God, just do as I say

I wish your well-being and a bright day...:)

 

Author's Note

Tell me how you felt after reading...always wanted to give a try on writing about poor and rich...didn't do great but I guess its ok..

Reviews

[Pratik]

I liked this piece. This is a strong, defined writing that doesn't mince words. The topic you write about requires a powerful tone which you successfully deliver. This also ends on a positive note where a message is given for the world in general. i would be honest with you though - This is not my first time I am reading a piece on faulty political system and corruption. I think the issue is so vital that it commands a lot of attention. You have managed to put your view across the table! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words and giving your view point..:)

[Patricia B. Hepler]

I experienced several emotions; I smiled,frowned and was saddened with the state of the poor contrasted against the rich. The emotion that I felt more deeply was uplifting hope.
Great write.
~pat

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Arun.J]

nice.. wonderful thoughts.. I should love to read more from you :)

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die // is there anything missing in this line?

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words...oh well i meant it from the poor peoples point of view....who knows after being without food and wandering through the streets that once you are asleep who knows what may happen..like in the sense if i ever knew that tomorrow i might not get food or may be for few days without food and all the troubles that lay ahead i would not be able to sleep wondering will i live through it...ahh guess it's hard to explain hope you got lil..:)

[Jess]

we are all equal,,,;]]]yes your right,,thats the reality of life,,and i think the government should do there responsibility.and stop discriminating the underprevilige .your piece is so REALISTIC......i love it;]]

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your wonderful words..:D

[Dominique]

This is neat. I think it is all with who the rich and poor is. With this perception, the poem was neat having the little guy working harder than the rich man. Nice write.

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Dominique]

You are very welcome. :)

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U should really keep on writing poems like this they're great and inspiring! 100/100 :)

[Cerise]

Aww..thankyou for your kind words missy..:)

[.]

U're welcome! :)

[TheJordBaker]

I really enjoyed reading this, a very strong piece and the last couple of stanzas in particular. Top work :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Pax]

"To feed and clothe is not a joke
To smile and live is a great hope"
~i grow up in poverty...so i really know the feeling..and this piece is close to home
you have done a great job in writing it..

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your wonderful words..:)

[Kaylor Mason]

Riches never bring hapiness and poverty never helps anytime . . . but given the choice, I'd rather be very, very rich

[Cerise]

awww....may u get what you wish..