Is it wrong to be rich or poor..?

a short poem on rich and poor

The birds chirping

Like the sound of bell

The rugged look of poor

Their stale smell

The smiling children

With a wonderful spell

The polluted surroundings

And lots more

The world seems brighter

For those who snore

 

Under microscope or sunlight

Look at the matter with a naked eye

Matters of poverty have gone too far

Politicians are sleeping to start a war

 

Filling their pockets to live royally

What of those poor working loyally

The pile of work of rich is too high

To consider about the poor

So all they do is lie

 

Think once for goodness sake

What about those things vanishing on earth

People will become extinct like all things do

Have you no shame or fear of the lord

Nothing will happen if you do well out of the blue

 

The life of poor forever in my eye

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die

It is poignant and very hard to forget

The feel of being poor once you are left

 

To feed and clothe is not a joke

To smile and live is a great hope

To beg, and cheat is not proper

You are role models teach them the way

 

Give them one chance

A high standard of living and a good pay

They will make you proud in every way

For the love of God, just do as I say

I wish your well-being and a bright day...:)

 

Author's Note

Tell me how you felt after reading...always wanted to give a try on writing about poor and rich...didn't do great but I guess its ok..

Reviews

[Pratik]

I liked this piece. This is a strong, defined writing that doesn't mince words. The topic you write about requires a powerful tone which you successfully deliver. This also ends on a positive note where a message is given for the world in general. i would be honest with you though - This is not my first time I am reading a piece on faulty political system and corruption. I think the issue is so vital that it commands a lot of attention. You have managed to put your view across the table! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words and giving your view point..:)

[Allen Smuckler]

I begrudge no one anything as long as they didn't trod on their "fellow" man along the way or at least give back to the less fortunate because they want to. The Gates, the Buffets, the ?'s....The .01 control the world and the resources...we control our souls and our destiny...You made the points in an honest, poignant manner and the only choice WE as Americans have (if we have any) is to vote the knuckleheads either in or out of office, and love the one we're with...
Very well written and expressed...
allen

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for your valuable opinion..am glad you liked it..:)

[Allen Smuckler]

welcome fanci

[S]

I like your work very much :) and think that if the rich gave to the poor, then there would no longer be rich and poor, just people all with enough to eat, enough clean water to drink, safe shelter, and decent medical care.
Once there are 'just people' then all the unique talents, gifts and abilities which each individual could contribute to the world, would not be lost due to the grinding poverty conditions some have to live in, and which too often kills them..... ah one day... when the rich give to the poor...and rich and poor no longer exist :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your wonderful opinion..:)

[T. Logan]

I really like this one. Especially how you wish us well in the last line. :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou...:)

[Kelsey]

I really enjoyed this, especially the ending. It gave me a little hope, as in not everyone in this world has lost their common sense and care for others. Lovely job. (:

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Soul Fire]

Good work! (:

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:)

[Soul Fire]

you're welcome

[khalid]

very nicely written. we are created as some to be rich and some to be poor but fortunately it doesnt mean that the poor must be unhappy while the rich is always happy, if we measure what ppl have, we should measure it totally not only according to money but we should include health, satisfaction, beauty, sweetness, morals, faith ....etc..very nicely written

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your wonderful opinion..:)

[Claire Twinn]

I like the start very much, the idea that poor people can be rich in spirit.
Your grammar or meaning is not always clear:
work pile of rich? what does that mean? do well out of blue? what does it mean?
more grammatical would be:
people will become extinct
fear of the lord
and good pay

[Cerise]

Thankyou...it was just a rough work...:)..am yet to edit it..

[Tate Morgan]

Ive wondered on this many times i would say rich is a road that spoils us poor the road that tries us

[Cerise]

Very well said..thankyou fro your opinion..:)

[kublakhan27]

I think you've done a great job with this...you've really tapped into the core of the issue and seem to have a deep understanding of the gap between rich and poor^^

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Twilight_Starlight]

Lovely

[Cerise]

Thankyou...:)

[Twilight_Starlight]

your welcome