Is it wrong to be rich or poor..?

a short poem on rich and poor

The birds chirping

Like the sound of bell

The rugged look of poor

Their stale smell

The smiling children

With a wonderful spell

The polluted surroundings

And lots more

The world seems brighter

For those who snore

 

Under microscope or sunlight

Look at the matter with a naked eye

Matters of poverty have gone too far

Politicians are sleeping to start a war

 

Filling their pockets to live royally

What of those poor working loyally

The pile of work of rich is too high

To consider about the poor

So all they do is lie

 

Think once for goodness sake

What about those things vanishing on earth

People will become extinct like all things do

Have you no shame or fear of the lord

Nothing will happen if you do well out of the blue

 

The life of poor forever in my eye

I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die

It is poignant and very hard to forget

The feel of being poor once you are left

 

To feed and clothe is not a joke

To smile and live is a great hope

To beg, and cheat is not proper

You are role models teach them the way

 

Give them one chance

A high standard of living and a good pay

They will make you proud in every way

For the love of God, just do as I say

I wish your well-being and a bright day...:)

 

Author's Note

Tell me how you felt after reading...always wanted to give a try on writing about poor and rich...didn't do great but I guess its ok..

Reviews

[Pratik]

I liked this piece. This is a strong, defined writing that doesn't mince words. The topic you write about requires a powerful tone which you successfully deliver. This also ends on a positive note where a message is given for the world in general. i would be honest with you though - This is not my first time I am reading a piece on faulty political system and corruption. I think the issue is so vital that it commands a lot of attention. You have managed to put your view across the table! Well done :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words and giving your view point..:)

[Neon]

The life of poor forever in my eye
I wouldn't be asleep if I thought I had die
It is poignant and very hard to forget
The feel of being poor once you are left ... This phrase's very 'Dominant'

Now what i felt after reading this piece is "Richer can easily take angels on a date and for a ride at all and poorer await for the day when they become richer and take angels for the ride to steal them from their nights.

[Cerise]

hahahah...Thank you mr for ur wonderful review...:)..dont worry nobudys gna steal ur angels frm u,..am sure ur kindness is wat makes u humble and will keep ur angels forever wid u..so don't fret over future..:P

[Neon]

My pleasure!
Yeah! I know, even I know very well that no one can steal my angels coz, angels even never leave me because angels love to come to me and be with me because it's me Who always steal other's angels from their devils and angels love this always because all unlimited angels of his planet want me to steal them from their devils because their devils give them pain but it's me who give them pleasure.

[Cerise]

yaa yaaa...i hav heard dat engh tyms now..so relax...u r de saviour

[AYVID N]

These are some bitter truths of this world. Let's hope that the less fortunate ones are also uplifted some day. You wrote beautifully as you always do. And I commend your thinking.

[Cerise]

Thank you my lady for your wonderful words..:)

[kimmy]

You have done such an amazing hob on this piece. I read this and re-read this. You have gotten right to the point and let people know hey these things are happenin and the government or whoever can try and turn a blind eye on the way of the world, but you know I always how about the higher ups live on a low salary and take care of their children, their bills, and make sure there is enough food to go around. They wouldn't be able to live without their power and money.

[Cerise]

Aww....Thank you darling...:) and thank you fro your wonderful opinion..:)

[marytownsend]

Very nicely written! You've shined a light on a subject that is often not spoken of, or if it is, not in a constructive way. I like this very much!

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou so much for your kind words..:)

[saunved]

It was a nice piece of writing...and true too...yeah...the poor are neglected a lot while the rich and the politicians get more than their pockets can fill...nice way to say it all...

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[Shay]

very interesting read and i liked how you wrote you mind on this topic.

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[B-poet]

Very uplifting and intriguing. I feel the essence of your poetic voice for social change. I've been down that road in some of my poems. I still have scraps of poems relating to this topic I need to format but it is still a worthy subject to be confessed about. Great job here. You out did yourself in a big way. :)

[Cerise]

Aww...Thankyou so much for your kind and motivating words...:)

[Arielle Ann]

aah its a cruel world! people born poor are not given even the chance to prove what they are capable of. through simple and straight words you described your points clearly, and this is exactly what these type of topics demand.you say , you dint do great, I say you were outstanding!

[Cerise]

aww...Thankyou for your wonderful words..:)

[Arielle Ann]

welcome always :)

[quinfinn]

you know, this left me thinking of the words "blessed are the meek for they shall inherit the earth" offhand i would say you did quite well illustrating your message.
good, solid write!

[Cerise]

Thankyou for your kind words..:)

[luviva]

i love this... u rationalised the points properly... i just love it en its gotten me thinking

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou for your kind words..:)..