My Lilliputian Pond

Today I missed a step and crossed an unknown path

But the beauty of it, without doubt captured my heart

It is a foggy little memory I wish to tell...

It was a magical land with a sparkling spell

Its beauty was eye-catching, though no eye had seen 

It was a small little place on an alien land

The place smelled of divine and heavenly fruit

Nature beckons and whispers gently...

A tiny, pure puddle with freshly, floating lilies,
Pebbles cushioning the round pond,
Floating dock and leaf with a unique bond
I went into a dream state, I just couldn't respond...

The whole scene was sitting on a lush green grass

With two huge trees and a beautiful swing sitting in between

Took the breath out of me, a dazzling sublime scene

And just when my eyes couldn’t bear without blinking

A wee little shut and open, the place was sinking...

My destiny awaited me somewhere far beyond

The peace and serenity, its beauty and purity

Is captured in my heart and soul

Someday I hope to go there again  

Live the moment and retain it

Before a rose pink light splashes

A wonderful new dawn...

 

 

Author's Note

I came upon a bewitching place tried to add a few things and write down the piece..Let me know what you think..Thankyou...

Reviews

[gombeggar]

very well done...i especially liked 'it was a small little place on an alien land' ...i would (but you don't have to) change the one line to 'the whole scene was sitting on a lush grass green'...just my thought cuz there's nothing wrong with how u have it at all :)

[Cerise]

Aww...Thankyou soo much....i have plans to edit i shall keep ur words in mind..:)

[~]

Wherever it is, it sounds just lovely. I like your descriptiveness! You really took your readers along for an adventure.

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou soo much for ur wonderful words..:)

[~]

You are welcome! Thank you for your avatar. It makes me happy :)

[Cerise]

I am glad..:)

[natzky]

hmmm...all hail..:)you described it majestically,anyhow thanks for sharing and letting me enter on that paradise..:)lol's

[Cerise]

Aww...Thankyou for such wonderful words, it meant a lot..:)

[Krista Weiss]

Great job!!!

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:)

[Corset]

a wonderful happy place in these words, lovely scene you've painted.

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for ur kind words..:)

[Dr. Wood ?]

quite bewitching

[Cerise]

Thankyou for ur kind words..:)

[deepblue04]

Wow, I like how you introduced the story, quite beautiful.. please write more!

[Cerise]

Aww/...Thankyou soo much ...:D..it meant a lot..:)

[quinfinn]

if it were the 70's i'd ask if you were using lsd at the time but....sounds more like a wonderful fantasy dream. you have captured and presebted it well. a luscious piece of art!

[Cerise]

lolz...Thankyou so much for your kind words..:D

[K.G]

this is truely remarkable,beautiful, and enchanting, pleae keep it up, im spechless from this wounderful peice of work

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou soo much for such wonderful words..:D..it meant a lot..:)

[K.G]

haha ur wellcome love,im glad it does :3

[Cerise]

:)

[kublakhan27]

I can almost hear the wind rustle the trees and see the lilies the scale the pond while shading my eyes from the sun's rays as I read this. You've really painted an evocative and sensuous picture here...great work as per usual :)

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou so much for ur kind words..:D

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :D