My Lilliputian Pond

Today I missed a step and crossed an unknown path

But the beauty of it, without doubt captured my heart

It is a foggy little memory I wish to tell...

It was a magical land with a sparkling spell

Its beauty was eye-catching, though no eye had seen 

It was a small little place on an alien land

The place smelled of divine and heavenly fruit

Nature beckons and whispers gently...

A tiny, pure puddle with freshly, floating lilies,
Pebbles cushioning the round pond,
Floating dock and leaf with a unique bond
I went into a dream state, I just couldn't respond...

The whole scene was sitting on a lush green grass

With two huge trees and a beautiful swing sitting in between

Took the breath out of me, a dazzling sublime scene

And just when my eyes couldn’t bear without blinking

A wee little shut and open, the place was sinking...

My destiny awaited me somewhere far beyond

The peace and serenity, its beauty and purity

Is captured in my heart and soul

Someday I hope to go there again  

Live the moment and retain it

Before a rose pink light splashes

A wonderful new dawn...

 

 

Author's Note

I came upon a bewitching place tried to add a few things and write down the piece..Let me know what you think..Thankyou...

Reviews

[Robin Dale Deatherage]

Nice ! Very Nice !

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:)

[TPK Stories]

Sounds like a lovely place...great imagination...

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much..:)

[Steven Cash]

very enhanted, and slightly eerie

[Cerise]

lolz..thankyou

[Hotwater]

Lovely imaginative poem... some places just grab you that way... well done.
*bird*

[Cerise]

Thankyou for such kind words..:)

[Heather]

Great images create a strong picture in the mind. The last stanza is almost like you stepped into a magical place in a dream and are longing to go back to that dream....back to this wonderfully vivid scene. Good job!

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for your kind words..:)

[RachelReaper]

the images I get in my head when I read this are absolutely stunning. If writing was a model, yours would be gorgeous :)

[Cerise]

Awwww....Thankyou soo much for such kind words...your words made my day..:)

[Kenaz]

This is lovely. Sometimes missteps are the only way to find places like this. Lucky you are to have captured this amazing place on the page. Grateful for a good read and a good image in my head. Regards,
-Kenaz.

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for such lovely words..:)

[Stanley Wilson]

great imagery well written loved the flow enjoyed it

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:)

[Pól]

I absolutely love this- the imagery is so vivid I feel I visited the beautiful place you describe. Its the sort of poem you would read many times, just like revisiting a place of outstanding natural beauty.
2 of my poems try to capture the beauty of the area where i live- "Donard" + "Narnia", but here you have achieved far more than I did.
Well done ff + thank you for sharing.

[Pól]

Sorry ff, I meant to make one tiny suggestion
2nd line "captured in my heart" what about "captured my heart"

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for your kind words...this is a place where i happend to venture by mistake i didnt have much time to look through out properly but what i saw i tried to describe .....sure i wll edit ..:)

[Suze]

I wish I could go to that place! You describe it so beautifully!

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much for your kind words..:)