Oh oh oh moonlight

A girl in love. SInging in the moonlight,heart broken."it could even become a song" This poem

Oh oh oh moonlight.

Your making my hear love him.

More and more.

My  love is reborn in the full moonlight.

Im used to being alone in the night.

Oh oh oh moonlight.

It seems to be,I'll never have you.

You dont speak nice.

Oh oh oh moonlight.

I search for the way into your heart.

I won't give up.

My heart is drawn to you.

It wont let me go away.

It makes me stay.

Oh oh oh moonlight.

Your holding my fragile heart in your hands.

My fragile dreams,you crush with  your hands.

The moonlight makes it worst.

Making romantic settings.

Then the night goes wrong.

Oh oh oh moonlight.

Oh sing a song in the moonlight.

Someday I'll be your.

I pray.

Oh oh oh moonlight.

Songs of saddness turn into happiness.

In fairytales.

Let that be me to.

Oh oh oh moonlight.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Hope you like it!!! Please look pass editing errors and stuff...

Reviews

[kewlbluetiger]

Nice job overall. Love the whole moonlight theme and the pink type is a nice touch. You repeated the word moonlight a ton of times, which does give it a lyrical feel. I know you commented on editing, but in this poem there's some minor spacing issues that could be caught in a re-read. You really don't want the reader to deal with these errors, because your writing is too sweet to be bothered with them.

I found these lines VERY interesting:
My fragile dreams,you crush with your hands.
The moonlight makes it worst.
Making romantic settings.
Then the night goes wrong.

That was really thoughtful writing! Keep up the great work. I enjoy it!

[Donovan "Grey Wolf" Go..]

wow thats really good and as a song it would be genius. cool

[KatieDaray]

Great poem! Its very interesting, and it grabbed me from the beginning and held me till the end!

[deeps]

I like this it's wonderful
I could hear this as a song
It has wonderful flow to it
well written.

[Sseoni]

Aw, what a cute poem! If this was a real song, I bet it would be awesome! I thought that your poem was beautifully written, wonderfully detailed, and greatly descriptive! It was so passionate and loving! Fantastic poem! I loved it! :D

[Mioki]

This is a very good love poem and song. It has a nice melody to it, and I think it would sound quite beautiful if sung aloud. Once again you've captured the essence of love and the true depths of a young girls heart. Great job on your writing~

[I'llPlayTheJuliet]

AMAZING! I loved it! great job!

[VintageHottie]

Oh how the nighttime catches our hearts. We can fill up our day with things to do and things to think about, but nighttime always finds us.
Very sweet peom.