My Burden

One of my more - unique - works, if that is the word. As always, I appreciate reviews!

This burden is not your burden; this burden is only mine.

Need not you care for this burden; it is only mine to care for.

Need not you worry; it is only my worry.

Need not you say anything, all is said in my mind.

Need not you look; I have looked far enough.

Need not you worry; this is nothing for you.

This burden is mine, and need not you go any further.

I will carry this burden, and need not you stop me.

This burden will kill me, but need not you cry.

This burden once was another’s, but need not you know.

I took a life, and need not you take mine.

Let me be with this deathly burden, for need not you be killed too.

I died tonight, but need not you.

You will live on, but need not to carry this horrible burden.

Leave me tonight, and need not this burden follow you.

You will be saved, so need not you carry this burden, too.

Reviews

[Andrew'sWonderland]

Excellent work! I loved the flow, message, and even the words chosen which created the "feel" of the poem! Extremely relatable and keep up the good work!

[Ryan]

Oh wow, I love it. The flow is wonderful, and the message is felt in every word. Very powerful. I can totally relate to this poem. Excellent job!