A Twilight Night

A little girl who lost it all

On a night with a twilight sky, gleaming in the oonlight stood a child. Though she was more of a young adult, at the moment she had the thoughts of a child running through her mind. She was lost in the world, with no one to help her. She started to hear noises, those scared her. She began to run, but fell to the ground. She was now crying, thinking that she has messed up the whole world. Not oneperson through the night cared enough to help her. That is how the world left her. To cry by herself, no caring person to be found.

Reviews

[fallen0lily]

I wrote this back when my computer had no spell check.. and i missed alot of my errors... opps.. ill get my new version up by March :)

[NightsShade]

You have a good idea here but I think that should write more to this. Also you should spell check this, there's some very distracting errors.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good beginning. Now you need to write some more of your story. Thank you.
Coyote

[heido]

I like this it reminds me of my story, Niavity.
Good imagery, nice flow.