Childs day

 

Sandpipers feet tiptoed to ballet quartet

As we swayed in Carmel bay,the day we danced the minuet

Singing with each laughing dauphins song

 

Ominous clouds  parted  off by  each child's hands

We listened as the sea gulls played, as if the band

Each sporadic seed dropped from the skies, softly

 

Falling erodes danced in speckled waves

Clipped shores each saved

Children freckling in springtime sun

 

Tasseled across the foams were ribbons of fish

Dancing to the suns special wisp

Children feet merrily pranced along, each bank of murmuring song

Reviews

[Annalisa]

This was very sweet, and painted a very clear picture. I had no trouble imagining the scene. Though I did catch on typo, in the line "s we swayed in Carmel bay,, the day we danced the minuet" you have two commas. But other than that good work ^^