inner self

In life, sometime we lost our inner self because of many reason. But your inner self will always be there.

I miss your smile

The you who care

The you who always want to rise to the top 

The you who never want to give up

The you who would cried just for the silliest reason

The you who love to laugh

The you who love to share her feeling

The you who take care of others

The you who think of other first

The you who wish the best for everyone

The you that is not afraid to let her self out

The you who tried her hardest

Why do you change

Is it the tired ness

Is it the fact that you have to lived far away from your love ones

Is it your health

Is it your family

Is it your friend

Or is it just YOU

Please be back to your caring, and loving self

I know you are in there somewhere

No one can make you come back but yourself

Come back. 

Author's Note

Can you relate?

Reviews

[PandaPeaceful]

Emotion runs down the lines beautifully, and I completely loved the way you have written this poem.

"No one can make you come back but yourself
Come back. " These words speak utter truth. Besides easily fixed grammar errors, your poem is fantastic.

[Fairy]

Thank you. And can you help me with the grammar errors that I have?

[PandaPeaceful]

Sure! For example, "The you who careS/ The you who always wantS to rise to the top/..." Just make sure to add the 's' in the verbs, when it is about (you).

[Fairy]

Alright thank you. ☺

[PandaPeaceful]

No problem!

[Warrior]

I connect to this. I think everyone has to go through a stage in their lives where they lose sight of who they are.
Some longer periods than others.
Nice write

[H L Rose]

I relate to this, and I think you have done a good job just plainly laying out this feeling of longing for ones “old self” that seemed to have had all these beautiful characteristics. It has inspired me, because as I ponder on this theme I remember being told that as the good in me(as a Christian I call it the Christ in me) grows, I will begin to recognize the bad in me much more often.

This poem has done a great job in explaining a theme in a way that provokes pondering. I loved the repetition and the only thing I would suggest revising is the tenses in some of the lines. Some are past tense like “the you who would cry for just the silliest reason” but others are present tense like “the you who care”. It might sound smoother if you changed it to past tense.

For example, “the you who cared”. However, if the present tense is purposeful I could be wrong.

Again, I love this poem and I feel like I can relate to every line. It was a nice read!

[Fairy]

Thank you for the feedback. I will sure work on it. That's one of my weakness.

[H L Rose]

Haha I can’t grammar so I get it.

[Done]

Very nice. I can sense the longing for someone to return to the way they use to be. We don't always know why someone changes or why they act the way we do. Nicely written.

[Fairy]

Thank you.

[Rye]

very nicely expressed,
there are those I wish would go back being who they are instead of hiding behind mask. nicely done

[Fairy]

Thank you. Yes I hope one day everyone can be who they are without having a mask on. Without worrying what others will think of them.

[L.N.]

So beautiful. Is it like a poet or lyrics for a song?

[Fairy]

I would said more of a poet. and thank you.