Summertime Memento

Yet still, I stand by the window.
What if the breeze blowing from the south brings along the jingles of joyful laughter, enchanting voices from blissful moments, and unfathomable memories of pearly times, as it sweeps over my ears?
What if.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Beautiful, longing questions that move summer over the soul. With these lines you make we wonder about the wind and all it holds.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thanks a lot for your gentle review, Froman. :)

[Huyana]

Too good to be this short .. :D You spark my world of imagination and its craving for more . :) I'd love it if you can please add more ... :D I really love this.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thank you for your appreciation. I shall keep my mind open. Just like the southern wind, something more to this might as well come by. But, there is one thing that I would like say: if you really find this to be special and of high appeal, then just tell yourself that good things come in smaller packages! :)

Keep reading!

[Country boy183798]

Hi, I really like this piece, it's well written and very beautiful. Memories are very intriguing, they shape and define us, and yet they are often the very source of our regrets. Well done. However, I would like to point out that to me this is more like a poem rather than a story. So I read and reviewed it as a work of poetry.
Keep on writing!

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Memories have a life of its own. They live and breed inside us. Talking about regrets: it is highly subjective. Because, even some regrets are worth recalling time and again.

Thank you for your valuable review. I totally appreciate you reviewing it as a work of poetry, because like you, there are many others who perceive it that way. However, there is a particular thought at the back of my head which prompted me to keep it as a story, a small little story, rather than a poem. But, thank you again for your nice words. :)

[TheRaven]

Is this a story or a poem? Looks and feels more like a poem than anything. 'Those' should be changed or erased, in the joyful laughter bit. It reads awkwardly. I like how the title kind of rolls into this in a natural sense. The idea of summer time and the warm breezes that pass over us with quickness, and just like that summer is over and we look back at it wondering 'what if'. What if we took a few more chances, what if we spent more time on this, what if we... You get the idea. Beautiful short piece, Fahmida. I can feel the longing and it reminds me of my own.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thanks a lot for your constructive feedback. Will definitely take your suggestions into account.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Quite good lines there and good use of words. I could feel the mild draught and recall many of my old memories. Well-written. Keep writing!

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Glad that it could touch you. Thank you for your warm appreciation. :)

[Rafy T.Nym]

A nostalgic thought expressed in a constructive way. No wonder, proses are a great medium to ruminate upon sweetest memories. The title 'Summertime Momento' has made the literary work lively and defined the inspiration of nature.

Overall an elegant literary work.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thanks a lot for your encouraging review.

[Shabeeh Haider]

A world of longing in these short lines. Beautifully expressed. Hope you would find time to go through my poetry

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thank you for taking out some valuable of yours and dropping a feedback. I surely will go through yours, my friend. :)

[Hannah Grace]

Beautiful! Gives me a picture in my head that's very clear

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thanks a lot, Grace. I suppose that serves my purpose well, then. :)

[Unknown Poet]

I really enjoyed reading this ....
Very nicely structured words...
While reading I could feel that relaxing breeze and longing moments, its a kind of mixed emotion..
Thank you for sharing my friend...

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Happy that it could chalk out an imagery on the canvas of your mind.

[Unknown Poet]

You are most Welcome My friend.. :)

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A poem, rather than a story, i think, Fahmida.

Daydream wonderings about the sounds and sights of the past, as one stares from their window, looking out on a changed world.
Longing for those past moments to return again on the summer breeze, to enchant and please the heart just one more time.
A very thoughtful piece of writing.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Thank you for the review. The reason why I kept it as story and not a poem, is because even though the outlook appears like a poem and maybe even the brevity does so, it felt more like telling a story in about a couple of lines while I was writing, rather than putting down a poem with a sway.

But, thank you for finding depth in those words. :)

[Ghalib Bakhtiar]

Your justification for choice of category is sound. I often find it restricting to choose any category at all, rather let writer choose a name, and leave the reader to their own interpretation.