Secrets

secrets, life

 

Secrets

By: Lani Mack

 

Drifting alone in a subconscious mind

I can’t help but yearn

For the sultry sweet night

Caved inside a body without a soul

I long for them to notice me again

To make me feel whole

The words I’ve spoken

Have driven them away in fear

Yet all I want is someone

To trust and be near

Depression has left me

Seemingly lifeless and dreaming

As if I’ll never wake up

Inside this world I’ve been living

My natural habit has long ago changed

No longer do I fall asleep 

And wait for the sun to come up again

Now I force myself to bed

In those wee hours before the light

And my body sings out its joy

When the pillow conforms to my head

Day and night creature

One and the same

Will it ever be over

When will I only wish for the day

 

Reviews

[LC Coyle]

I agree with Sarah- the rhyme was so natural I didn't even notice it at first! Usually I don't like centered poems, but in this case it fits- it adds to the tone of loneliness and abandonment.

[Sarah]

Really great description of depression and loneliness. I loved the rhyme, you did a great job at making it sound natural. ^_^