"no nothing"

just something was in my mind

beeen poor never was a shame
day after day they are the same
who i should blame?
stop calling my name
cause i'm searching for knife
to get over from my f*****g life
i belive i would die
and never fly
i never get what i want
i must leave my dark spot
my life it's not a quote
just a big space for hope and thoughts

Reviews

[ANTO]

"my life it's not a quote" - but now your quote about your life might become a quote - ironic that eh, Goldifada
As you point out it had to be said and I agree ; such sentiments are better on a page where they cant get access to knives -
Bravo

[Zahra]

Very nice, effectively crafted

[Alex]

THERE IS SUCH A STRONG MESSAGE IN THAT LINE "MY LIFE IT'S NOT A QUOTE JUST A BIG SPACE FOR HOPE AND THOUGHTS" LIFE INTOXICATE BUT STILL YOU CREATE AN ARENA FOR THOSE WHOM HAVE LOST HOPE.NICE POEM

[goldifada]

thank's for both of you!! :)

[A. Amos]

deep, dark and magical love it

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This seems forced in the lines... the rhyme and write could be revised to give more life to this verse... as a reader the read is more of a rant... venting... so to speak...