Loss

This poem reflects my feelings after physical injury and chronic pain affected my life.

I feel

like I haven't truly laughed,

from the center of my being,

in years and years.

 

In its stead,

a feeling of numbness,

dumbness,

like hearing is muffled

and sight is dim-

mislaid something,

but what?

 

Don't know what I'm doing

or what I've done,

where I'm going

or where I've been.

Forced,

by this force,

to stand still.

 

Everything happens, happened,

around me, by me,

past me, passed me.

There is no catching up.

 

Maybe this is the body's way

of protecting me

from full consciousness,

so I won't scream.

 

Is it so self-centered,

to be lost

at my loss?

 

 

 

Reviews

[RaindropsRoses93]

This is quite simply an amazing write. I can totally relate to the pain and the sorrow that were laced through the lines of this poem. I always feel like there is something I am missing or something just out of my reach so its like I am blind to it. Thanks for the kind review on my work and any further reviews will be returned = )

[Luke Rawlings]

I like the mood given by this piece...it gives the feel that it was written in a moment of passion and I can respect the intensity of the piece. Simply brilliant and quite insightful.

[Voice]

Wow this is so deep it is simply amazing. You have expressed yourself beautifully and your emotions are so raw and clear. Just a glorious write...

Voice

[bluessadmood]

oh dear friend ,but why all the sadness,it seems the way you talk that life has passed you by,forever and ever,that everything has come to an end,that here you have to step down from life train ,like you have nothing more to do with it anymore,but thats wrong ,we life till the last day ,till our breath leave this body of us ,but not before ,as we are alive we share in every life joy and there are so many ,listen ,close your eyes can you feel me by your side just dream ,that we will dance in any way ,life possibilities are limitless,for our dreams know no limits,can you answer me you hear the music play i put you a tune ,will you listen ,i picked it especially for you so lets dance i would love to dance ,lets sway to the rythm ,lets feel the impact of the moment forger ,just forget anything but you and me ,and dance,you will even forget yourself ,just dance with me please,i think i feel so light can you feel it,i feel like flying high and you with me ,just close your eyes and dream ,dream with me,we are flying high ,i want to show you places ,you alone ,its special for you do not worry i hold tight you will not fall ,just hang up tight,and have faith in me ,for i care dear ,i really care ,please dance and fly away high with ,let me smile ,but only for you for i really care ,i care only for you,i wish i was with you,for i care i swear i care...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Damn that is a very intense piece... it truly shows how a breakup can cause us to lose all perspective and more importantly ourselves... a really emotional write.

[Mark D. Chevalier]

Wow...you have captured the essence of loss, inasmuch as I personally can identify with it. The short lines gave me the feeling of anger and frustration, and perhaps the hint of a mind that struggles to reconcile things both past and present.
"Everything happens, happened." Being a student of history I often wonder about the validity of that concept. Even though it isn't put nearly as eloquently as you did.
Fantastic poem Barbara!
Mark