Not A Lot To Ask

I'm in such pain,

not the scrape your knee kind,

where I suck up air between my teeth,

holding my knee tightly, swearing,

"Oh, s**t!"

Not the headache kind,

where I rub my temples,

shut my eyes

and lay down for half an hour.

 

 

This pain

is the kind,

where I clench my teeth,

until, I swear, something's going to break

and I feel so sick to my stomach,

I cannot eat

and if I try to do anything,

it isn't for long,

"Cause, God, I have to lay down

and God, I can't take it anymore

and God, I wish I could die,

cause God, I really, really can't 

take anymore

and I wish I could just go to sleep

and never, ever wake up."

 

I'm in such pain,

that that,

doesn't seem like a lot to ask.

2004

Reviews

[Lorraine Pearson]

oooooooooooooooo....I do know this pain...when a "coma" looks enticing. When you hold your hands over your ears, and scream, "NO MORE PAIN!" You know you are at your breaking point... I think about when I was an early mother, and I was told that if the baby drives me to the point of frustration, I should just put them safely into his crib. I wonder, when my baby was unable to be satiated, and I put him into his crib during his struggles, if he too in his baby way, was screaming-- NO MORE PAIN...I want to just sleep! This was a cool write, and left me pondering much... Thank you.
~Lorraiyne

[Celestial Witch Child]

I wish I could make everything okay...

[Mauricio Montoya]

nice work.

[Pax]

a sad painful poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

Real pain can make us wish for death. A powerful poem. When they is no end to pain. Life is hell. No weakness in this poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Sandra Rains DeBusk]

Barbara, This gave me chills.

[Flow]

Great visuals to describe the level of pain in this one. I could feel the will giving up and wanting relief even in death.

[Ralphy]

Visualizing one's pain is not an easy task, but your words have delivered an impression that will etch a window in my mine for time to come. A very dramatic write

[justjenn_2u]

A gut wrenching pain that takes over your entire body! Very descriptive words to explain this pain. The words flow smoothly in this piece!!!

Thanks for sharing.