Villanelle of the Madman

"When in my mind though rise..."

Villanelle of the Madman

By: Ethan West

 

When in my mind thought rise

The Crashing waves of life

Leave all else to lies

The bitter morning despises

My heart in dismal strife

When in my mind thought rise

When hands all arise

They’re acts like sharpened knife

Leave all else to lies

I find my foul demise

When misery make melody my wife

When in my mind thought rise

They fight me fast, their fury flies

Their screams shrill as the fife

Leave all else to lies

You’ll find me in disguise

And meet me bearing scythe

When in my mind thought rise

Leave all else to lies

Author's Note

This is a Villanelle. It has a very complicated rhyme scheme and is the last poem from my book that will be posted on this site. I had someone request that I do a Villanelle and being as I already had a couple I decided to post my favorite of the two :) I really hope you guys enjoy this! Any input you have for me is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Mark]

I'm sorry to hear that you've decided to leave WC.
This contained grammatical errors which to my mind lessened its effect. Your adherence to the difficult form was noteworthy, and I very much liked lines like, "When misery makes melody my wife", and, "The crashing waves of life". I shall miss coming to know you better.

[BorealPoet]

Huh? I'm not leaving wc

[Mark]

Your Author's note above says, "This is the last poem"...ahhh, I see my mistake, NOT "the LAST poem", but "the last poem FROM MY BOOK". My bad!

[Mark]

PS: Have a new villanelle, just written today, that I will have posted in a little under an hour, if you're interested. Title: "The Old Poet's Lament"...to echo "Old Soldier", I suppose!

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a great poem and well written~!

Keep writing~!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. I believe we need some madman emotions and senses to survive in this world.
"I find my foul demise
When misery make melody my wife
When in my mind thought rise"
A nice closure to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[gombeggar]

intriguing phrasing and structure...almost free flow thought but not quite

[Frieda P]

Amazing, being able to write within those constraints....it floors me. Good one.

[Dr. Wood ?]

no idea either but the pattern is there to see, you did a clever job here

[Junert]

I don't what a villanelle is but I like it.

[BorealPoet]

Sweet! I'm glad you liked it Junert!