Villanelle of the Madman

"When in my mind though rise..."

Villanelle of the Madman

By: Ethan West

 

When in my mind thought rise

The Crashing waves of life

Leave all else to lies

The bitter morning despises

My heart in dismal strife

When in my mind thought rise

When hands all arise

They’re acts like sharpened knife

Leave all else to lies

I find my foul demise

When misery make melody my wife

When in my mind thought rise

They fight me fast, their fury flies

Their screams shrill as the fife

Leave all else to lies

You’ll find me in disguise

And meet me bearing scythe

When in my mind thought rise

Leave all else to lies

Author's Note

This is a Villanelle. It has a very complicated rhyme scheme and is the last poem from my book that will be posted on this site. I had someone request that I do a Villanelle and being as I already had a couple I decided to post my favorite of the two :) I really hope you guys enjoy this! Any input you have for me is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Mark]

I'm sorry to hear that you've decided to leave WC.
This contained grammatical errors which to my mind lessened its effect. Your adherence to the difficult form was noteworthy, and I very much liked lines like, "When misery makes melody my wife", and, "The crashing waves of life". I shall miss coming to know you better.

[ewest1220]

Huh? I'm not leaving wc

[Mark]

Your Author's note above says, "This is the last poem"...ahhh, I see my mistake, NOT "the LAST poem", but "the last poem FROM MY BOOK". My bad!

[Mark]

PS: Have a new villanelle, just written today, that I will have posted in a little under an hour, if you're interested. Title: "The Old Poet's Lament"...to echo "Old Soldier", I suppose!

[the crying cup]

fantastic poem! two thumbs up and a smiley on top :)

[Valentine]

This is a new type for me also..you may be opening up our minds to new kinds of writing..Valentine

[Lina Grey]

I have never heard of a Villanelle before. This is very interesting and the title pulled me in first. Thank you for sharing this :)

[Bats In The Belfry]

Well done I especially enjoy " You will find me in disguise" and "when misery make melody my wife"...these lines make you stop and ponder which is what I like best as a reader...double check your description for a small typo : )

[lee von cleef]

The mental rhythm this insights is making me drunk.

[eglantine]

I'm mostly a free-verse poet, but one structure I do enjoy is the villanelle, especially Plath's "Mad girls love song." Not sure why you capitalized "Crashing" in the first stanza Thanks for sharing

[eglantine]

bwhahaha, forgot I had already commented on this.

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

The title stands out for me,nicely written.Thanks for sharing

[eglantine]

Yes, the title caught my attention

[MandaBear]

Very cool. You did a great job

[J. F. Charleston]

It's very good and mind blowing! I too am working on a poetry book that can be an actual book when finished. So I hope you have the best of luck with yours.