Branches

Branches

By: Ethan West

The brittle branch breaks

The frozen earth shakes

Speak not of this hurt

It's but a miserable cry

I stop for a moment and wonder

When was thought so gentle placed in thunder?

I take my hand to steal a dewdrop

My tear, from grass where fallen, I lie

I lift up my heart

And continue to start

My hand slides along a new branch

And with a gentle sigh

I lift myself onto my new way

Through the broken earth begged me to stay.

I strive for the top with only one goal

One branch that would break on high

Author's Note

This is one of an additional 3 poems from my book that I'm releasing exclusively to the writerscafe community. Thank you guys so much for all your support and enjoy these three poems! Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Nice use of words which results in a good piece of poetry..... Well done!
You might want to make a correction or two in this beautiful poem...
"I take my hand my hand to steal a dewdrop" .... Either you can omit 'my hand' as you have repeated or you can simply put a comma.....
Rest assured, it is a nicely penned down poem...

[ewest1220]

lol ya I messed that one up. It was a typo but it's fixed now :) I'm really thrilled you enjoyed it!

[Valentine]

I really like this poem, it takes deep thinking to figure out just what you are saying her..

[ewest1220]

Well I am absolutely thrilled you took the time to read it :) thanks again for your input!

[MandaBear]

very unique :)

[ewest1220]

Thanks! :)

[kublakhan27]

I love the rhyme scheme and the little bits of alliteration scattered throughout...very unique :)

[ewest1220]

Thanks! It's always nice to hear form you!

[Annabelle Lee]

nice work.

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Baby Ricochet]

For some reason it made me think of the book a separate peace.

[ewest1220]

Not sure if I've read that one actually. May have to look it up!

[Lina Grey]

very motivational Mr. West. must all strive for the highest branch

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

[quixotic_rose]

An artist with words. I appreciate the way you use them. beautiful poem Mr. West.

[ewest1220]

Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm really thrilled you enjoyed this thank you so much for reading!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a good consiencious write

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[gombeggar]

I take my hand my hand to steal a dewdrop ...needs a comma or colon before 'my'

reads well

[ewest1220]

Fixed it

[Junert]

And you make me strive high. Your completed work encourages us here.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it Junert it's nice to hear from you!