Branches

Branches

By: Ethan West

The brittle branch breaks

The frozen earth shakes

Speak not of this hurt

It's but a miserable cry

I stop for a moment and wonder

When was thought so gentle placed in thunder?

I take my hand to steal a dewdrop

My tear, from grass where fallen, I lie

I lift up my heart

And continue to start

My hand slides along a new branch

And with a gentle sigh

I lift myself onto my new way

Through the broken earth begged me to stay.

I strive for the top with only one goal

One branch that would break on high

Author's Note

This is one of an additional 3 poems from my book that I'm releasing exclusively to the writerscafe community. Thank you guys so much for all your support and enjoy these three poems! Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Nice use of words which results in a good piece of poetry..... Well done!
You might want to make a correction or two in this beautiful poem...
"I take my hand my hand to steal a dewdrop" .... Either you can omit 'my hand' as you have repeated or you can simply put a comma.....
Rest assured, it is a nicely penned down poem...

[ewest1220]

lol ya I messed that one up. It was a typo but it's fixed now :) I'm really thrilled you enjoyed it!

[Dean]

Ah, another poet to watch...to look forward to. Thank you for introducing yourself to me this morning. Do come by my own page--meantime I shall return!

[The dark story]

"I lift myself onto my new way
Through the broken earth begged me to stay.
I strive for the top with only one goal
One branch that would break on high"...these are my favourite among all..so ravishing and flows so elegantly...your diction has made it more poewrful in it's effect!!

[Stacey Watts]

This was wonderful. I enjoyed the way it flowed. I find myself leaving cookie cutter responses on other's work. I am going to try and stop that. I just find myself in awe with very few words to say. The climb up from despair is what life is about. Very powerfully written here with a never give up message. Nicely done.

[Megan]

Interesting..Didn't turn out the way I expected, and that's what I like about it. I love the use of imagery and metaphors!

[Yasmin]

Beautiful

[J. F. Charleston]

Brilliant! This piece makes me wonder... in a good way, that is. Painting a simple, but elegant picture you have. I can bet that your book is going to be really, really great. I can't wait to read it. Good luck, and keep writing.

[Rhianne Ney]

It's a great one with good chosen words. Great~!

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

"The brittle branch breaks
The frozen earth shakes
Speak not of this hurt
It's but a miserable cry" Love it,thanks for sharing

[ewest1220]

The pleasure was all mine :) thanks for reading!

[quarintine_deathangel]

Stanza 4 line 2 Did you mean through or though?
The depth of thought in this is really interesting. Thankyou for writing and sharing! The whole peice is intruiging to read. Reminds me a little bit of Robert Frost's poem 'Birches' kind of a bittersweet one to read. Wonderful write! ^^

[ewest1220]

It's been awhile since I've read that poem but now that you mention it there are some similarities ^_^ there were some typos though : P