Barren Night

Barren Night

By:  Ethan West

As I walk through this tainted night

A well known beauty beyond my sight

I cannot help but to think this

That this night is without her bliss

That something has, is run amok

Within her broken barren luck

A tomb of her making, for her to flee

She goes within it merrily

But even then she cries for help

To me it sounds as if a yelp

For as we pull her from her grave

She turns away from our gifts gave

And even now, as it was then

She is now in tomb again...

Author's Note

Not my best work but it was built in a very raw/unedited form. Let me know what you guys think!

Reviews

[Bats In The Belfry]

I really like the lines "Within her broken barren luck" and "A tomb of her making, for her to flee"...they are thought provoking and full of meaning...I enjoy the scenarios that run through my mind as I try to figure out the what and the why of the demons she battles and yields to.

[ewest1220]

Interesting way of putting it. I see what you're saying on this one thank you so much for your insight on my work! Thanks for reading :)

[Bats In The Belfry]

Welcome :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Holt s**t you finally wrote something new. I'm just thrilled you're back on the WC. Yes you've definitely written better but hey, at least you're back

[ewest1220]

Hey man I'm glad to hear that you're glad I'm back! Ya this isn't my best one by far but I have better coming along. Finally got everything sorted out so I can really work on my writing. Good to be back and nice to hear from you!

[Annabelle Lee]

not bad.

[ewest1220]

lol I agree, not bad. Not my favorite by far.