Chapter 2: The Trap Is Set

Chapter 2: The Trap Is Set

Elizabeth stood in the clearing, frozen in fear. She could run no further as the bandits had outflanked her. They closed in from every direction chuckling under their breath.

Elizabeth's hand slid down to her waist where a long thin dagger was resting against her soft skin. Waiting to be released on one of the five bandits surrounding her. She knew who needed to die in order for her to survive. She had to kill the leader.

But all the bandits looked the same. Big, harry, and stupid. All but one of the bandits had a rusted broadsword in their right hand. The fifth bandit bore a long handled battleaxe.

“Well now,” said the man with the axe in a rough voice. “You've had your fun, but we really must be going.”

Elizabeth laughed desperately. “You would only kill me, why should I listen to you?”

“Well the way I see it you have three options,” the man spoke. His voice had shifted slightly into a sinister overtone. “You can run, and die. We can leave you with the shifter and he'll kill you...”

“Or I can come with you and die!” Elizabeth screamed.

“You would rather be destroyed by a monster?” the man questioned. “You heard the explosion you know what is on it's way, thanks to your cries for help. The damned have a thirst for blood that is never ending, and I hear they enjoy nothing more than a slow and painful death.”

Elizabeth looked around her wildly, her eyes finally meeting the blue sky. Would it be the last time she saw the sky? Would this mean the end.

As she continued to stare a black figure suddenly became apparent, a deep blue light centered at it's head.

She smiled softly at her brothers. “He's here,” she said nervously. “Be ready my friends...”

Author's Note

Short chapter, however I saw this as an important angle to set up. What do you think?

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

*hairy

Okay first things first, this must be a terrifing ordeal for Elizabeth but i dont feel it. I dont feel her panic and her desperation , i have no idea what she's thinking or feeling... and that is a very important part of this piece i feel. Because its the chase its the main focus of the chapter.

Another very interesting twist in this story, im hooked very tightly although still very confused but i do beleive you will clear all that up because the plot is thickening and progressing quite beautifully.

[ewest1220]

She isn't scared :) that's why at the end she say's "Be ready my brothers." Just a little hint for ya it really packs a punch later in the book. But either way I'm really glad you're still enjoying my book thank you so much for reading!

[Ama May Cooper]

Elizabeth stood in the clearing, frozen in fear. She could run no further as the bandits had outflanked her. They closed in from every direction chuckling under their breath.
But you say she is scared in the first sentance

[ewest1220]

Two shay lol I'll have to take a look at it and see what I can do. Thanks for the heads up!

[T. Logan]

After end there should be a question mark, but that's all i see wrong with this. It's short, yes, but still good!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'll take a look at the ending as well thank you so much for your input! I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[Serenity Faith]

It is a short chapter, but sometimes, they need to be so. Keeps the curious, more curious than before ^_^

[ewest1220]

Good ^_^ I really hope you enjoy this one I really value your opinion! Thanks again for reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

Great description made this situation come alive. I like her thoughts and the ending. A whisper of hope. Thank you for the outstanding chapter.
Coyote

[ewest1220]

Thank for for the outstanding review! I'm really glad you liked it Coyote thank you so much for reading!

[gombeggar]

very visual...more likened to script writing...makes me think it has much potential for use as a film in fact...need to see more...i'd say move forward with it

[ewest1220]

Will do my friend! Thanks for reading!

[Yheela]

Why would she follow them? How "crazy" is she?
I think you could stretch this out a bit more, describe them - sight, smell.
Maybe even give us more as to how she's feeling knowing what's coming.

[ewest1220]

Hmm very true, and an interesting perspective as well. I'm not sure if crazy is quite the word to describe this character, I would call her more "twisted" but that's just personal preference :) but hey thank you so much for the input and thanks for reading! I hope you enjoy the rest as well!

[Yheela]

Oh, and the "brother" thing, her calling them that at the end - makes sense after reading ch 3. Wouldn't mind if you mentioned her connection to them here as well.

[ewest1220]

Ah I see, It's true I kind of allude to that a little suddenly in this one... Huh I may just explore into that! Thank you so much for the input!

[Admiral Kirk]

Ooh, short but epic!!! This sets up quite an exciting scene... I look forward to reading more of this book soon. :P

[ewest1220]

Sweet! I've got a couple chapters that should hopefully be entered by later tonight so stay tuned ^_^ either way thank you so much for reading it's always a pleasure to hear from you JS!

[Admiral Kirk]

Great! :P I will read the rest soon... Thanks, it's always great to hear from you too. :)

[ewest1220]

Thanks :) oh and the new Chapters just went up just to let you know ;)

[Admiral Kirk]

WOO! Oh, I need to read the first two! Lol! :D

[ewest1220]

lol I would probably recommend it ;) thanks for reading though it means a lot!

[Admiral Kirk]

No problem. :) I'm glad that you're glad that I'm reading it... Makes me glad... :)

[Poison Ivy]

i think sometimes short chapters are the best, if you can contain a short build up and a good cliff hanger to keep the reader reading, than why not put a briefing in between longer chapters. :)

[ewest1220]

Very good point. I think based on the feedback I've gotten on this one this chapter is going to remain unchanged! Thank you so much for reading I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[Poison Ivy]

i especially like the way you left this one at the ending.
genius!

[ewest1220]

I'm not sure if I would say "genius" but I'm really glad you liked it! (Trying to be humble over here! lol) Either way thank you so much for reading I'm really thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[Poison Ivy]

no problem at all. ;) i always make it a point to honest in my reviews.

[ewest1220]

Ditto! Thanks for reading!

[Admiral Kirk]

I would call it genius. XD It's awesome!!! :P

[ewest1220]

And just like that! I'm blushing again XP

[Admiral Kirk]

Well, get used to it, you're good. :D

[Beck Louise]

Great chapter, well done. So much suspense!! Great job:)

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed my work!

[FantasyLover24601]

Great read! Even though it was short, it definitely helped to set the stage for this story. However, I hope the chapters get longer and more detailed as this story goes on.

[ewest1220]

I'm actually working to mesh them together somewhat so you might just get your wish lol hey thank you so much for reading I really value your input on this book! Thanks again!

[FantasyLover24601]

You're welcome!