A Tale of Love

A Tale of Love

A Story by ewest1220
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You were there the entire time....

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A Tale of Love

By: Ethan West


I will now tell you a tale.  It's a tale of affection and love of the most beauteous kind.  You will be keen to disregard this tale as something false.


You will see, through unseen eyes, a man and a woman protecting their hearts.  You will see them set up barriers in mind and act that should have ripped them apart.  But from some beautiful miracle these barriers fall.


I will show you those first awkward moments turn to bliss as they wander within the other's eyes.  The poetic comfort as their laughs erase in their mind all else but each other.  In a sense you will become a part of that bliss.


I will show you their bliss turn into love.  A love that will persist the test of time.  Something pure, something beautiful.


And just like that my tale has ended.  But where did it begin?  Confused?  Don't be.


You were there the entire time...

© 2012 ewest1220


Author's Note

ewest1220
Was supposed to write a love story, not sure if this was quite what my teacher had in mind but people seem to like this one. Not my personal favorite I'll be honest. What do you guys think? Any input is greatly appreciated!

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Honestly, I think this sounds like a well-written preface or description of a story, not a love story unto itself. That's not a radical interpretation I guess, because that's pretty much what it is, right? There are elements of a story here, namely characters and a rudimentary narrative. But they are all so evanescent and abstract, and the story is so short, that I couldn't really get into it.

I did notice that as I was reading this short story, I pictured the scenes described unfolding in my mind. Therefore, the mysterious passage at the end I interpreted as meaning that you wrote this in such a way as to deliberately evoke this tale in the minds' of readers so that they saw themselves in the position of the characters--so in a sense, I felt like you left them deliberately blank so that we could see ourselves in their places. That's just my hypothesis and it may be way off the mark XD

Ultimately, I think of this as a prettily-worded and poetic introduction to a story that sounds generic, but moving too. However I'd say it ends too abruptly and without advancing very far, so it's elusive. But that's what you were going for I think.

Or I am just way over-analyzing this XD

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Actually on your second point you are absolutely spot on. I love the analysis of my work you have g.. read more



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I really like this, and it sort of reminds me of something that would be on the back of a book or something like that. :) Good job and keep writing! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Will do ;) I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this thank you so much for reading!
I am not really fond of pure innocent love so I loved the sneaky last part:
And just like that my tale has ended. But where did it begin? Confused?
Don't be. You were there the entire time...
It describes how great stories must end...before you have the chance to resent them.





Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Love the perspective! Thanks again for reading it's always nice to hear from you!
This is beautiful... I love the way it's somewhat unconventional.
I love the last line... it left me stunned, to be honest.
Again, well done :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks! I like the last line as well so I'm glad you feel the same way. I'm glad you liked it than.. read more
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Its good however it mostly reads like a synopsis to something bigger. Like something that I would read on the back of a book or a DVD cover. Then again its more than what it should be if that were the case. Overall its hard to define this. Good work though!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Interesting thought actually. I see exactly what you mean though it would be weird to see my stuff .. read more
Excellent writing!
Powerful, strong writing.
Great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you liked it!
i always find your work enthralling.......i really like this story ...........but you know what...i thought at some point that i am reading a fascinating poem..it's just great.keep writing like this.:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

I can see where you'd get that actually it kind of has that "poetic" tone I'm always stuck on ;) wel.. read more
The dark story

12 Years Ago

thank you so much.......
Very good

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks!
Hatchling

12 Years Ago

Your welcome
Powerful and unusual, great job! Excellent writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you liked it!
i liked it. it was unusual and unique. great write!!1

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks!
I do like it :) It's unusual which is always brilliant, so yeah very nice :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Unusual is a good word lol glad you liked it!

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