The Dark Man's Plea

The Dark Man's Plea

By: Ethan West

Panted on in beauty's chill

My heart in steep decline

Broken on each battered thrill

My spirit never mine

The heart of heart and spirit hate

What manner man I be

What mannered thing that I create

While rusted soul does sing

And in this conflict I'll confess

My broken body is a mess

And in my own forthcoming way

I am the devil, here to stay

I broke the pact of poison made

And tears of ink now stain my face

The grave mistake that I have gave

In this dreadful, dreary place

Evermore I am to drown

No substance of this man I be

If you find substance in this shroud

Please never be a man like me

Author's Note

A very reflective work I hope you enjoy it!

Reviews

[David the writer]

Interesting. I love how the posion is never specified, so the human mind naturally imagines the posion to be something it can relate with. And the reflection on yourself is also relatable to others for we all make mistakes. Everyone always feel evil too because they've made so many mistakes, sometimes they don't get over said mistake. But great job with this!

[Poetic Beauty]

Males one.think and take.a deep look at themselves

[Poetic Beauty]

Makes

[ewest1220]

I agree. Thanks for reading I'm glad you enjoyed my work!

[WatchWillow]

I loved this poem!

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Priscilla Sayers]

A wonderful piece. I feel the solitude in it, the passion that lies beneath a broken heart. I know this feeling well. Very poignant!Nicely done!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[Priscilla Sayers]

My pleasure new friend!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

a tossing of aptetude and skilled writing, well done, good read.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[J. J. Nightingale]

I'd comment, but I haven't a clue what you wrote .. Wow I guess this a comment ..


J.

[ewest1220]

lol thanks for the honesty! Made me smile :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

Nurses always like to bring smiles ! :)

[ewest1220]

lol I'm a cell phone salesman in a small town so they come in mad and leave happy :) but man do they ever come in mad! Thanks again for reading!

[Baby Ricochet]

Man, that's beautiful. I want to write something like that about deployments.

[ewest1220]

That could be interesting! Make sure you leave me a read request when it's done!

[R J Askew]

There is the E.A.Poe feel with the word 'Evermore'. This pieace also instantly made me think of 'the walking dude' in THE STAND. Nice one!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked this one. Poe is my favorite poet as well so I like that you made the connection!

[R J Askew]

I like Poe also. He was as mad as a hatter.

[ewest1220]

Oh absolutely that guy was completely insane. But man what a talented writer.

[R J Askew]

Have you ever read Charles Baudelair he was even whackier .. THE FLOWERS OF EVIL is the collection to go for. Some cracking stuff in it. He combined form poetry with surrealism. All the surrealists idolised him years later.

[ewest1220]

Interesting... Can you send me a link?

[eighwoeifj]

Your writing is just so powerful, I love it. I just have a question.
"The grave mistake that I have gave"
Shouldn't the last word be 'given'? I could be wrong, but it sounds funny like that.

[ewest1220]

In new english yes, in old english it's kind of on the line lol I was a little restricted by the rhyme scheme on this one.

[eighwoeifj]

Ah. I'm not good with old English >.>

[Pax]

a very strong ending. i like it.

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Seyi Ojenike]

Yes I did enjoy the poem... Nice poem, love it

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!