The Dark Man's Plea

The Dark Man's Plea

By: Ethan West

Panted on in beauty's chill

My heart in steep decline

Broken on each battered thrill

My spirit never mine

The heart of heart and spirit hate

What manner man I be

What mannered thing that I create

While rusted soul does sing

And in this conflict I'll confess

My broken body is a mess

And in my own forthcoming way

I am the devil, here to stay

I broke the pact of poison made

And tears of ink now stain my face

The grave mistake that I have gave

In this dreadful, dreary place

Evermore I am to drown

No substance of this man I be

If you find substance in this shroud

Please never be a man like me

Author's Note

A very reflective work I hope you enjoy it!

Reviews

[David the writer]

Interesting. I love how the posion is never specified, so the human mind naturally imagines the posion to be something it can relate with. And the reflection on yourself is also relatable to others for we all make mistakes. Everyone always feel evil too because they've made so many mistakes, sometimes they don't get over said mistake. But great job with this!

[icaros13]

Good rhyme and flow in this write. Your first stanza is a poem unto itself..."My spirit never mine." Good write!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Muse]

Poison..hmmm...yes I think many of us are guilty of concocting our own deadly elixir. The substance of man...I have yet to understand. But I think life's sweet elixir can be tampered with to harm our inner and outer-selves. Like stress...from past regrets...can become toxic...and drown us from the inside. A broken pact is a moment of self-reflection. Beautiful penning.

Muse

[ewest1220]

I agree with you my friend and I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work! Thanks for reading!

[A love for poetry]

so true, so true! Great poem.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it!

[Kaela]

I find great substance in this piece. I am continually drawn to your work. I can't get enough of the meter, the phrasing and the wordplay. My favorite stanza:

The heart of heart and spirit hate
What manner man I be
What mannered thing that I create
While rusted soul does sing

[ewest1220]

That one is one of my favorites as well! I'm really glad you liked it thank you so much for reading!

[Brandon Mathis]

Your title hit the ball out of the park for this poem perfect for it, love it man!!!

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! Nice to hear from you again my friend!

[Brandon Mathis]

Like i said been busy with family and writing new styles of poetry, i never forgot bout ya

[Sheila Kline]

Wonderful - insightful, and words to which I may relate to in a way that causes my spirit to dance to a tune that I wish to remain at a hum for the rest of my life!
You have expressed your dark side in a way which makes me scream for the light of life to always illuminate my pathway of decisions!

[ewest1220]

Wow! I'm really thrilled that you feel this way about my work thank you! And thanks for reading!

[forevermore1218]

"the heart of heart and spirit hate" was my favorite line, not sure why, but it spoke to me the most. Loved this piece, as usual and i have really learned a lot from your poetry. I like the way you formed your stanzas and how each one was equal in terms of lines and meaning of the whole message.

Fantastic write mate!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it thank you so much for reading!

[The dark story]

the rhyme,the emotions,the diction and the visual imagery is just too great.........but now i think it is not fair.you have always got enthralling work with yourself.and i just eulogize you in the same old boring fashion...so now...i'll say...."SPOUTED SUN..........YAHOO STUFFS TO"!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11tell me...did you got what i've said??????

[ewest1220]

I think so. I think that you enjoyed my work ;) and that you have a new piece out called Spouted Sun? Am I correct? O.o

[The dark story]

ITS STUPENDOUS
HATS OFF TO YOU

[ewest1220]

Poignant, and a wonderful dark way to look at yourself. Only those survive... ;) keep it in mind... you're a gifted poet, I can learn from your flow, and rhyme scheme... but I'm more a free-styler. I loved to read your deeper thoughts, they are interesting. Amazingly done dear poet.

E.L.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I can learn a lot from you as well as free style is WAY out of my comfort zone :) I'm thrilled you enjoyed this thank you so much for reading!