I Know Not Why The Caged Bird Screams

I Know Not Why The Caged Bird Screams

By: Ethan West

She lies inside her cage and screams

A song of sorts by end of means

Locked up for words which she had none

Locked up for nothing she had done

Innocent eyes and painted face

I saw when I upon this place

And then and then I cannot see

Why she lay there quietly

I tried and tried but could not budge

The padlocked birdcage door

I cried and cried and did not judge

She lay there now forevermore

Her beauty in this night so pure

A light of white like crystal mirror

I tried and tried to save her fate

I tried and tried to give her faith

I left that barren door unmanned

But the keys were hiding in her hand...

Author's Note

I wrote this for someone very dear to me who's going through a hard time. Please give me any feedback you can I really really appreciate it.

Reviews

[Alyssa Carlstrom]

This totally describes my life and the way it used to be, so you touched my heart. But that's my past.
I love how you said "But the keys were hiding in her hand...", it spoke truth. The keys were always in my hand, I just had to decide to let myself out. Keep up the good work! This poem is absolutely beautiful.

[ewest1220]

Thank you so much! I'm really glad that my work meant something for you and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!

[Morrigan Nicole]

The ending was stunning, very unexpected, and full of sorrow. If this was written for someone dear to you, did she ever find freedom?

[ewest1220]

Perhaps ;)

[Muse]

The reader wants to know...did the canary ever fly free? Or are you saving that for another poem?

[ewest1220]

Both actually

[Muse]

This canary...would like to know how it ends.

[ewest1220]

I'm waiting to see what happens and then I'll finish the poem. I'm still waiting to see how it truly ends myself...

[Muse]

Understood.

[ewest1220]

It's a tough one I'm currently "In observation" to see if the change is lasting. That will really effect what I write. But hey I'm really glad you enjoyed my writing thank you so much for reading! It was nice to make your acquaintance!

[Muse]

Likewise...I hope you share a happy ending. :)

[StephMichelle]

Stunning, this touched me deeply.

[ewest1220]

Thank you I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!

[Sarah Hitchcock]

Again a very well written poem, i like the rhythem of the words, and once upon a time, i thought they all had to ryhme.

Sarah.

[ewest1220]

lol I see what you did there! But anyways thank you so much for reading I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[Sarah Hitchcock]

Can you believe I actually never meant for it to rhyme until I just read it back I noticed it did....lol....sorry in the late reply, I have no laptop and have stolen my partners, mine needs to be fixed, if possible, or I am going to have to save for a new one.

[ewest1220]

No problem!

[Sarah Hitchcock]

:-)

[forevermore1218]

Very nice job mate. This one reminds me of my own connections to mirrors and purity. Though you really did an amazing job on this one, I have one suggestion; instead of "I saw when I upon this place" on the third set of lines, try and reword it so it fits in to the poem a little better. The poem is so perfectly written and this sentence just stands out. Its like driving on a incredibly smooth road, surrounded by beautiful nature and all of a sudden, you hit a bump in the path.
Fix that one sentence and this poem will be fantastic :)
I hope your friend finds their way and that this poem helped them become better.

Loved it mate :)

[ewest1220]

Interesting input I'll play around with it and see where it gets me :) Thank you so much for reading and I'm once again thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[Nath]

Some people won't let themselves be saved because they are the ones standing in their way. Too often, people don't realize they have power over their lives because they let other people, things and events have too much influence. But instead of getting up and changing anything, they mourn the status quo.
A good thought well expressed by a beautiful metaphor, makes a great poem overall.

[ewest1220]

Well said my friend well said. I'm really glad you enjoyed my work and thank you again for reading!

[Eiades]

I normally don't like poetry, but for some reason this spoke to me. Keep up the good work!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad it spoke to you :) thank you so much for reading!

[Lily Mae]

You've penned your emotions very well with this...some times just being there for someone in their moment of need makes all the difference..x

[ewest1220]

I agree :) thanks for reading I'm thrilled you liked my work!

[gombeggar]

speaks of that old emote...well written me thinks

[ewest1220]

I'm glad you liked it methinks lol thanks for reading!

[gombeggar]

no prob

[Yang-Bi Li]

This is good; I love the tone and the rhyming - it flows nicely. I hope the one you wrote this for is holding up okay... It was nice of you to write this for them.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really thrilled you liked it!

[Yang-Bi Li]

You're welcome :) It was good ^^