I Know Not Why The Caged Bird Screams

I Know Not Why The Caged Bird Screams

By: Ethan West

She lies inside her cage and screams

A song of sorts by end of means

Locked up for words which she had none

Locked up for nothing she had done

Innocent eyes and painted face

I saw when I upon this place

And then and then I cannot see

Why she lay there quietly

I tried and tried but could not budge

The padlocked birdcage door

I cried and cried and did not judge

She lay there now forevermore

Her beauty in this night so pure

A light of white like crystal mirror

I tried and tried to save her fate

I tried and tried to give her faith

I left that barren door unmanned

But the keys were hiding in her hand...

Author's Note

I wrote this for someone very dear to me who's going through a hard time. Please give me any feedback you can I really really appreciate it.

Reviews

[Alyssa Carlstrom]

This totally describes my life and the way it used to be, so you touched my heart. But that's my past.
I love how you said "But the keys were hiding in her hand...", it spoke truth. The keys were always in my hand, I just had to decide to let myself out. Keep up the good work! This poem is absolutely beautiful.

[ewest1220]

Thank you so much! I'm really glad that my work meant something for you and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!

[Poetic Beauty]

This reminds me of the story of Maya Angelou. She was raped and became mute afterwards for many years. SHe has a book by this title. She is an outstanding woman.

[ewest1220]

I loved that book actually that's why I titled it as such. I'm really glad you liked it thank you so much for reading!

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome and great inspiration

[RachelReaper]

This poem is genuine, I can see that. That person will get better with time and with someone who cares about them in their lives, someone like you.

[ewest1220]

Thank you, I sure hope so!

[quarintine_deathangel]

Very true that many people hold the keys to their own cage. Like being addicted to something but never completely cutting yourself off from it. Watching close ones go through trials is like having every bit of your sanity and soul ripped, shredded and torn by anticipation and disappointment. So far this is the first writing of yours I've read and you've definitely done well; Especially with keeping a form about the poem. Excellent job. Good luck to your friend. Thanks for writing ^.^

[ewest1220]

And thank you for all your kind words and informative input ^_^ I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work thanks for reading!

[eglantine]

I hope this poem helps them and you are a great friend to be there for them during a tough time. I like the repetition you have. Some parts the ryhthm gets off-track which distracts a bit, but other than that, nicely put. I'd just end on a period though, instead of an ellipsies. Makes it over-dramatic.

[ewest1220]

Actually an interesting point I'll try it out and see how it feels. I meant for the ... to be kind of a "hint, hint" but I think that message may be stronger, like you said, with just a period. Thank you so much for your input it's nice to hear from you!

[gombeggar]

very well done poem...i like the rymns the way they pace more then just a standard rythmn...poeticly it has a vey 19th century, maybe early 20th feel to it to me at any rate...better still when read a 2nd time

[ewest1220]

I can see that actually I like your interpretation of my work! Thank you so much for reading and I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[gombeggar]

welcome...keep writing...keep honing yer works

[Junert]

Guess that will put a smile on that special someone's face, even if it's a faint one.

[ewest1220]

It did ^_^

[Junert]

Lucky that someone.

[lee von cleef]

Very good ,I feel like this with my mom who has dementia,my older sister has had her "legally locked up, " two sides to every story , but such a loss.

[ewest1220]

I'm sorry to hear that my friend. Though I am glad you enjoyed this I hope things get better for you, thanks for reading.

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This is a amazing and magnificent poem!
I loved it!
100/100

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed my poem!

[Beck Louise]

This is absolutely fantastic!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you feel this way about my work!