Firefight

Firefight

By: Ethan West

The fire rages bright

Of man reborn again

When all was before now

I was dead before then

But now in life's fire I burn

And I am brought to begin

So let the fire burn bright

My hearts fuel within

Burning bright as the night

For black fuel fuels black flame

I take back my life

And take pride in my name

My name I cry out

To all that will hear

I scream and I shout

I will not bend in fear

Fear of that darkness

That black flame reviewed

The cold bitter sadness

Of a once tired feud

Broken by storms and battered by dream

I take up my hand and reach for the light

I hear my heat ring, and it's voice does sing

I take up my sword and fight

Author's Note

Very very raw poem. This is the first draft I'm not sure whether or not I like it yet. So I'll leave it up to you guys! Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[Melody]

The rawness does indeed help it out. It's rhythm is off a little bit for me, but it doesn't really do anything negative to the poem. If anything I think the off-rhythm belongs to this piece,but it could be stronger and might be better with the last line being longer, I feel like that would make it just right. :)
Great read though.

[ewest1220]

Also interesting perspective. The rhyme scheme was intended to limp I'm not sure if I quite succeeded. I'm glad you liked it though! Thanks for reading!

[Rhea752]

NOT SURE IF I LIKED IT!!! jeez only i am allowed to be pessimistic. you listen here. this poem was absolutely amazing. don't you ever doubt yourself because so many people love your writing and i am one of them. got it? Kay. Kay. Good.

[ewest1220]

Wow really? Thank you for those kind words it really picked me up about this one ^_^ I'm really really glad you enjoy my work!

[Rhea752]

I MEAN IT!!!! don't you ever doubt yourself, okay!! just, don't do it!! your writing is to good to be doubted especially by the author.

[Admiral Kirk]

This is pretty good! Very descriptive, and I detect a lot of powerful symbolism. It's also inspiring in a way. Probably from "I take up my sword and fight" indicating that you won't give up; "I will not bend in fear" indicating courage; and a couple other phrases. Great work! This really speaks to me.

[ewest1220]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for giving me a read!

[Admiral Kirk]

No problem! I'll send you a request or two maybe once you don't have so many already... :D

[ewest1220]

Go ahead and send them if you'd like. Gotta understand that tomorrow I'm on a mission lol will probably do more than 35 :)

[Admiral Kirk]

Haha, okay... :D