Firefight

Firefight

By: Ethan West

The fire rages bright

Of man reborn again

When all was before now

I was dead before then

But now in life's fire I burn

And I am brought to begin

So let the fire burn bright

My hearts fuel within

Burning bright as the night

For black fuel fuels black flame

I take back my life

And take pride in my name

My name I cry out

To all that will hear

I scream and I shout

I will not bend in fear

Fear of that darkness

That black flame reviewed

The cold bitter sadness

Of a once tired feud

Broken by storms and battered by dream

I take up my hand and reach for the light

I hear my heat ring, and it's voice does sing

I take up my sword and fight

Author's Note

Very very raw poem. This is the first draft I'm not sure whether or not I like it yet. So I'll leave it up to you guys! Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[Melody]

The rawness does indeed help it out. It's rhythm is off a little bit for me, but it doesn't really do anything negative to the poem. If anything I think the off-rhythm belongs to this piece,but it could be stronger and might be better with the last line being longer, I feel like that would make it just right. :)
Great read though.

[ewest1220]

Also interesting perspective. The rhyme scheme was intended to limp I'm not sure if I quite succeeded. I'm glad you liked it though! Thanks for reading!

[Androglossia]

They say that during the time of dealing with life's ups and downs and moving on is one of the deadliest parts a person may experience in life. Your poem is obviously seeing the key to moving on and achieving recovery. This is all about deciding to go on and fight.

Raw poems offer raw emotion coming from the very heart of the writer. Well done!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really thrilled that you liked it and your reviews are always fantastic! Thanks again!

[Justin Flume]

Very Poe.
E. My friend.
I wish that i really could have your way with words.

100/100

Your Friend N/A

[ewest1220]

A lot of people made that reference and I didn't even realize I had sounded like him lol thanks for reading it's always a pleasure!

[Justin Flume]

No probs E.

[Tommy]

The battle cry of forgiveness, it is a two sided sword, we must learn to let go the woes of our brothers; however, the harsher battle is to break the hardness that swallows a heart, and show mercy towards self…

I am enjoying your work Ethan!

Great Write!!!
RLG,
Tommy

[ewest1220]

Thank you! You're reviews are quite deep and I am honored that you enjoy my work! Thanks again for reading!

[Tommy]

Your work is deep; it deserves some depth of thought poured into it. I love works that get my mind flowing...

[ewest1220]

Same here my friend same here.

[~Sara~]

I thought this was another great poem. The rawness that you added made me visually see a darker color(that's a good thing) if you know what I mean. Since I've been reading your writing, I noticed that you like writing with dark emotion and dark description. You're definitely reaching that goal! Great job on the amazing piece, :)

[ewest1220]

Thanks! And you're right I really do like writing in a more "darkly beautiful" nature. It feels deeper to me for whatever reason... But anyway lol I'm thrilled you liked my work and thank you so much for reading!

[Laura]

I think the rawness makes it... refreshing to your usual poem. Very good write :)

[ewest1220]

It has turned into a very interesting change of pace :) I'm glad you liked it!

[T. Logan]

I'm a tiny bit of a pyro, so the fact that this was about fire was pretty awesome. It's really good, and I especially like the part with the sword at the end.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

[TheJordBaker]

stunning, powerful as usual. I think rawness helps it out a bit here too.

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Tai Ryens]

I see the various lines that may spark disappointment, but I personally think it would do better if you were not to touch it at all.

[ewest1220]

Interesting. I'll keep that in mind that's for your input on that one!

[Kacee]

I love how your endings always have such a wonderful twist!

[ewest1220]

I love twisted meanings :) it makes every experience interesting. I'm thrilled you like it! Thank you!