A Mirrored Image, Love Incarnate

A Mirrored Image, Love Incarnate

By: Ethan West

Fire awakens what hate could not

Forever lost in tattered creed

And beauty's soul in anger's rot

Is left one final, tender plea

I came upon her in brightest light

My heart was blank, my soul was cold

Struggling with bitter fight

Struggling with darkness bold

And in six words my heart felt rest

My mind as restless as a bee

My heart then put my mind to test

As I outstretched my hand to thee

But her mind is dark like mine

As if to bathe in irony

She sees herself in dark decline

But all there is is light to me

And so, alone, we share this fate

We are two beautiful things to be

Two souls divine, but full of hate

Two hypocrites bound to what they see

And the broken line that cleans our slate

But ah alas, I am the dark

Even though this, you say to me

That I am the light within your eyes

What a beautiful thing for us to see

Author's Note

Not sure if I like the title... But hey! What can ya do?

Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Justin Flume]

"I came upon her in brightest light
My heart was blank, my soul was cold
Struggling with bitter fight
Struggling with darkness bold"

One of the best stanzas i've ever laid my eyes on.
It's clear to see that you have inspiration from greater things.
I just write about my life.
But let's cut to the chase.
Two times you've made me cry tonight.
That's not something done easily Ethan.
With five stanzaz you kill of some bad f*****g memories that not even my shrink could.
I somehow feel like i want to collaborate with you someday when i'm semi-equal to this s**t.
Mother of god am i speechless...


100/100
Your freak friend

N/A

[ewest1220]

Wow n/a I'm really glad my work has touched you in this kind of way. Thanks for reading my friend I'm glad you liked it!

[Timeless-Chan]

idk i like the title! it draws people to it and makes them interested. I mean i thought "just what could it mean?" when i saw the title:)
love the lines:
Fire awakens what hate could not
Forever lost in tattered creed
And beauty's soul in anger's rot

they are just simply beautiful!

[ewest1220]

Interesting :) I think the title is going to stay ^_^

[demureminds]

To your note: I really like the title and I think it's suitable for this poem!
Also you really know your way with words. Everything seems to flow without difficulty. My favorite is the first stanza! Great write (:

[ewest1220]

Thanks! At least somebody likes the title lol I'm really glad you like it!

[Gypsie]

Dark beauty and dark emotion are one of the most powerful places to write from. Often what results tends to be too dark for my taste. That being said, I found this piece walking the line; expressive, dark and beautiful. Excellent write! Looking forward to reading more of your work.

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! That line has always been a tough one for me. I've crossed it before (Look at A Figure in the Night) and it really got me going lol Thanks again for reading!

[Eve]

This almost feels prophetic, you have made a wonderment in word, full of emotions that I can definitely relate to in a huge way, well done!

[ewest1220]

Prophetic. That's a new way to describe this one. Very interesting I'm thrilled you like it!

[TheJordBaker]

really good, certainly hits home and touches a nerve. stanza four in particular is fantastic.

[ewest1220]

That's one of my favorite stanzas as well. Glad you liked it!

[allie_arrowz]

the last two lines are great

[ewest1220]

Do I sound conceited if I agree? O.o

[allie_arrowz]

no haha.

[ewest1220]

lol I agree then! Thanks for reading!

[Admiral Kirk]

This poem is awesome! I can feel true love through this poem, love that is more than just skin deep. You have the ability to make your readers think and feel such beautiful emotions with every poem you write.

[ewest1220]

That dark beauty is where I feel most comfortable in writing. My poetry book is the same way. Very reflective and dark. I'm thrilled you like it!

[Admiral Kirk]

You're very good. Great job! :D

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

A mirrored image. Love beyond human flesh. Narcissus redivivus. The third stanza made me think - what 6 words? I couldn't guess.

[ewest1220]

Funny thing is I can't even remember myself... What a mystery lol Thanks for reading!

[Melody]

I love it! :D It's so sweetly but sourly romantic, I think that's how I'd describe it....Lol. I do agree that the title is a little "ish", but I can't really think of any of other titles for it. Lol. I'd probably be able to suggest something if I didn't have a headache. :P Lol.
Good job. :)

[ewest1220]

lol Thank you!