The Fate of a Rose

The Fate of a Rose

By: Ethan West

Blood red stains the surface of the intertwining petals.  Like a tightly wound knot it keeps its grip.  Clasping around its own heart, letting the center of it just barely see the light that strained to give it life.  Large thorns thrust them self from its body, ready for the soft hand that would unwittingly pierce itself on them.  Yearning for the high pitched scream that would rent the air asunder.  Relishing the taste of blood as it slid sinisterly down its stem as the screams turned to tears.  The wails of its victim excited it, and made it want to spread itself out.  To take in the beautiful misery it  had caused.  But it could not move.  It would wait there until a rubber hand would pluck it from the brush.  Breaking the thorns that gave it joy, and then the very people it had oppressed would watch as it wilted and died in the windowsill.

     The sun beat down on its mangled corpse as its torturers plucked it once again from its perch.  Tossing it in the garbage, the lid closing over its broken form.  Then all was black...

Such is the fate of a rose....

Author's Note

A dark depiction of a common love symbol

Reviews

[EileenMarie]

wow..... my ex used to give me roses all the time! and I felt like

"the sun beat down on its mangled corpse as its torturers plucked it once again from its perch. Tossing it in the garbage, the lid closing over its broken form. Then all was black..."

after I left.........

wow...... powerful! Great write, great imagery.... so descriptive and right on!

[BorealPoet]

Wow thanks! I'm really thrilled you liked it!

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Dark with perfect imagery. It's beautiful, I love how you used a rose for it, such a beautiful flower with it's thorns and all. This is exceptional! Suspensful and almost brutal, yet intricate and enchanting. Nice mix of it all.

[BorealPoet]

Thank you so much for this review! I'm really glad you liked it and I always appreciate your input! Thanks again!

[Coyote Poetry]

Sad to see a rose died. A rose bush is cool. The plant will come back a couple times a year. I have my grandfather rose bush he brought from England years ago. I like your story of the rose. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[BorealPoet]

It was my pleasure! I'm glad you liked it!

[T. Logan]

It might read better if it was seperated, but i still really like it.

[BorealPoet]

True. Never knew why I didn't separate it come to think of it lol I might just fix that. I'm glad you enjoyed it thanks for reading!

[Rhea752]

you've turned the symbol of love into something dark and creepy. well done. i wonder, is the fate of the rose also the fate of love. great job!!!! :)

[BorealPoet]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Rhea752]

the pleasure is all mine!! :)

[~Sara~]

This has to be another one of my favorites! Your writing is kind of like flipping something inside out and making adjustments..if that makes sense.. I've never read any kind of writing like this before(in a good way).. Keep up the good work!

[BorealPoet]

Flipping something inside out and making adjustments... Well put :) Thank you so much I'm thrilled you like my work!

[BrynnaW.]

There was beauty in a dark, sad way. The description was spot on and your story came together so well. It's so true that this is what happens to a rose in a sad, dark view. Somehow you managed to tie beauty into darkness which is very impressive. I loved the little twist to the rose and I don't think I'll look at a rose the same way again! The image was woven nicely into these words. Very well done and keep on writing!

[BorealPoet]

Wow thank you! I'm really glad you liked my work!

[Megan]

ooooh. ooooh. Quite different from what I expected this would be. Love your interesting diction, presenting a counterpart to the common perception of roses representing a romantic love. Have to admit, won't know what to think if I receive a rose in the future.

[BorealPoet]

lol it put's it in a strange perspective doesn't it. I'm thrilled you liked my work thank you!

[The dark story]

this is such a pleasant work i have ever read..the way you have personified the rose and then deeply and elegantly described the way it has gone through that ill-treatment....is awesome...it is so nicely written..........i should say that it is among the best intriguing stories...hats off to you.......

[BorealPoet]

Wow I'm really glad you liked it! Thank you!

[Timeless-Chan]

i really don't know how you can take something that is dark and sinister and you twist and morph it into something that is just simply elegant and beautiful! Well done:)

[BorealPoet]

I'm glad you liked the twist :) Thank's for reading!

[demureminds]

Wow, I love the descriptiveness of this. The darkness of it was a great twist considering roses are usually symbols of love, etc. But your version of it is quite intriguing. I liked the spin on this one. Very well written!

[BorealPoet]

I'm glad you liked how I did it! Thank you so much for reading!